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Some believe that a city should keep its old buildings. Others think somenew buildings are needed to replace the old buildings. What’s your opinion? Explain why. v.1

Some believe that a city should keep its old buildings. Others think somenew buildings are needed to replace the old buildings. What’s your opinion? Explain why. v. 1
Much could be said about different ways of testing or checking students at schools or universities. The most popular ones have always caused been causing very exciting discussions and debates around the world. We all do realise that teachers need to have a system that helps them to test their students' knowledge, so they can see how effective their teaching methods are. The question is do we really need to put so much pressure on these features? Are they really so effective? The first thing about tests and exams is, that they do check the level of information the students managed to learn from the lectures. The questions usually cover the area that has been taught at the institute, so if students can answer them correctly it means that the teaching was successful. The other, equally important aspect is, that due to the tests or exams that students are facing at school they get motivated to study more, in order to get better marks and to improve their knowledge. Sometimes it might be just the fact that it is called an exam, that makes students get together and study harder. On the other hand, some students might feel discouraged by the same fact that makes the others motivated, but of course, results in low marks in the actual exam. They also think that the results are very often not relevant to their efforts they put into studying. Because the marking system is not fair, they just do not feel like studying more for the exam. Furthermore, many students find the exams of different kinds very stressful, especially the school ones. They often think that there could be another way of testing, less stressful, that should be introduced in schools or universities. The supporters of this opinion often bring out the fact, that most of the students start smoking actually because of the stress they are exposed to at school. And that is definitely not beneficial for you or your health. To put things together, is there really such a big need for exams at schools? Is there really no other way to check how students effective are the teaching methods? That is of course not that easy, but still, I am deeply convinced that things can be changed. It requires all the involved sides to think and come up with new ideas that could later be put into schools and that wouldn’t be that stressful anymore, so students can actually start enjoying them.
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be said
about
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different
ways of testing or checking
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students
at
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schools
or universities. The most popular ones have always caused been causing
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very
exciting discussions and debates around the world. We all do
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realise
that teachers need to have a system that
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helps
them to
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test
their students' knowledge,
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so
they can
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see
how effective their teaching methods are. The question is do we
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really
need to
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put
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so
much pressure on these features? Are they
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really
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so
effective?

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first
thing about
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tests
and exams is, that they do
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check
the level of information the
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students
managed to learn from the lectures. The questions
usually
cover the area that has
been taught
at the institute,
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so
if
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students
can answer them
correctly
it means that the teaching was successful.

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The
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other
,
equally
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important
aspect is, that due to the
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tests
or exams that
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students
are facing at
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school
they
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get
motivated to study more, in order to
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get
better marks and to
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improve
their knowledge.
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it might be
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just
the fact that it
is called
an exam, that
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makes
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students
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get
together and study harder.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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students
might feel discouraged by the same fact that
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makes
the others motivated,
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but
of course
, results in low marks in the actual exam. They
also
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think
that the results are
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very
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often
not relevant to their efforts they
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put
into studying.
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Because
the marking system is not
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fair
, they
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just
do not feel like studying more for the exam.

Furthermore
,
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many
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students
find the exams of
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different
kinds
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very
stressful,
especially
the
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school
ones. They
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often
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think
that there could be another way of testing, less stressful, that should
be introduced
in
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schools
or universities. The supporters of this opinion
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often
bring out the fact, that most of the
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students
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start
smoking actually
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because
of the
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stress
they
are exposed
to at
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school
. And
that is
definitely not beneficial for you or your health.

To
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things together, is there
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really
such a
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big
need for exams at
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schools
? Is there
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really
no
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other
way to
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check
how
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students
effective are the teaching methods?
That is
of course
not that easy,
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but
still
, I am
deeply
convinced that things can be
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changed
. It requires all the involved sides to
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think
and
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come
up with new
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ideas
that could later be
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put
into
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schools
and that wouldn’t be that stressful anymore,
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so
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students
can actually
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start
enjoying them.
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IELTS essay Some believe that a city should keep its old buildings. Others think somenew buildings are needed to replace the old buildings. What’s your opinion? Explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
413 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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