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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. v. 2
Global sporting events like the Olympics and FIFA world cup have played a major role in bringing nations closer. Few people believe that these sporting events, provide a platform where nations can exhibit their traits. However, others believe that huge money spent for hosting these events is indefensible and I fully disagree with this argument. This essay will present some arguments in favour of hosting international sporting events. Hosting global athletic events help countrymen to showcase their traditional and cultural values and reveal their hospitality standards. For instance, recent Olympics in London helped foreigners learn the craftsmanship, rich culture, artefacts, architectures, lifestyle, etiquettes and charitable acts of British people. Moreover, investments have done over constructing or upgrading the infrastructure of the sporting arena, exhibit how skilled the nation is. During the actual competition, it displays their governance, technological skills, team management and communication skills which can be very inspiring for the visitors. For instance, FIFA World Cup in Brazil spread the message how well the nation is in building complex infrastructure that can accommodate hundred and thousands of spectators. Furthermore, another plausible counter in favour of hosting sporting events is the exhibition of moral and ethical values of countrymen. Professional attitude, skills and teamwork displayed by young athletes of the host nation shows how good their sporting academies are at gross root level. To conclude, re-recreational events provide a launch pad where a nation can show the failure of its skills and standards. Spectators flocking all over the world can be inspired by these qualities and can even exercise them in their homeland.
Global sporting
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events
like the Olympics and
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FIFA world cup
have played a major role in bringing
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nations
closer. Few
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people
believe that these sporting
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events
, provide a platform where
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nations
can exhibit their traits.
However
, others believe that huge money spent for hosting these
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events
is indefensible and I
fully
disagree with this argument. This essay will present
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some
arguments in
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favour
of hosting international sporting
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events
.

Hosting global athletic
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events
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
countrymen to showcase their traditional and cultural values and reveal their hospitality standards.
For instance
, recent Olympics in London
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helped
foreigners learn the craftsmanship, rich culture,
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artefacts
, architectures, lifestyle,
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etiquettes
and charitable acts of British
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people
.

Moreover
, investments have done over constructing or upgrading the infrastructure of the sporting arena, exhibit how skilled the
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nation
is. During the actual competition, it displays their governance, technological
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skills
, team management and communication
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skills
which can be
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very
inspiring for the visitors.
For instance
, FIFA World Cup in Brazil spread the message how well the
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nation
is in building complex infrastructure that can accommodate
Use "a hundred" or use a number before 'hundred'.
hundred
and thousands of spectators.

Furthermore
, another plausible counter in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of hosting sporting
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events
is the exhibition of moral and ethical values of countrymen. Professional attitude,
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skills
and teamwork displayed by young athletes of the host
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nation
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shows
how
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good
their sporting academies are at gross root level.

To conclude
, re-recreational
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events
provide a launch pad where a
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nation
can
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show
the failure of its
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skills
and standards. Spectators flocking all over the world can
be inspired
by these qualities and can even exercise them in their homeland.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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