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Talk about a person in your life who has inspired you. Describe the person and explain why you found him/her inspirational. v.1

Talk about a person in your life who has inspired you. Describe the person and explain why you found him/her inspirational. v. 1
There are several unique methods undertaken by countries round the world to deal with the poverty issues and the poor people. While, absence of the better education and equal job opportunities could be some of the potential reasons for poverty. Whilst, providing the best education to everyone along with applicable law giving equal opportunities could be some of the potential alternatives to curb the poverty worldwide. With rising poverty across countries in the world, this is indeed an important and pivotal issue to handle, which contributes to the overall growth of the country. The education plays an important role in upbringing of an individual, and also prepares to compete in this competitive market. Today, largely market is driven on the merit of people, and someone with potential could extend opportunity for anyone. The recent research paper published by the famous daily “The Times” suggests that 50% of the population are below the poverty line today, with the improvisation of education system poverty can be curbed by 90% by the year 2020. The education system shall be designed by the government in such a way which shall be imparted to everyone. The Government, should subsidize the education, common to all. Moreover, the campaign such as “Each one Teach one” shall also be considered as an additional option. Furthermore, the job opportunities in sectors like the government, public sectors, etc. , should be available to everyone based on merits. Therefore, this will help people to put the efforts and achieve jobs in the long run. In summary, the education system and the job opportunities extended to everyone shall be based on the merits could be potential options to reduce, if not abolish the poverty issue.
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poverty
issues and the poor
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people
. While, absence of the better
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education
and equal
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job
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opportunities
could be
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some of the
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potential
reasons for
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poverty
. Whilst, providing the best
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education
to
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everyone
along with applicable law giving equal
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opportunities
could be
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some of the
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potential
alternatives to curb the
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poverty
worldwide.

With rising
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poverty
across countries in the world, this is
indeed
an
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important
and pivotal issue to handle, which contributes to the
overall
growth of the country. The
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education
plays an
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important
role in upbringing of an individual, and
also
prepares to compete in this competitive market.
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Today
,
largely
market
is driven
on the merit of
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people
, and someone with
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potential
could extend
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opportunity
for anyone. The recent research paper published by the
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famous
daily “The Times” suggests that 50% of the population are below the
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poverty
line
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today
, with the improvisation of
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education
system
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poverty
can
be curbed
by 90% by the year 2020.

The
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education
system shall
be designed
by the
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government
in such a way which shall
be imparted
to
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everyone
.
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The
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Government
, should subsidize the
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education
, common to all.
Moreover
, the campaign such as “Each one Teach one” shall
also
be considered
as an additional option.
Furthermore
, the
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job
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opportunities
in sectors like the
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government
, public sectors, etc.
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,
should be available to
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everyone
based on merits.
Therefore
, this will
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help
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people
to put the efforts and achieve
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jobs
in the long run.

In summary, the
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education
system and the
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job
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opportunities
extended to
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everyone
shall
be based
on the merits could be
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potential
options to
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reduce
, if not abolish the
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poverty
issue.
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IELTS essay Talk about a person in your life who has inspired you. Describe the person and explain why you found him/her inspirational. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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