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Some believe it is good having people with extremely high income in the country while others think government should try to limit it Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some believe it is good having people with extremely high income in the country while others think government should try to limit it 1
All societies in the world consist of rich and poor people and some portion of the society believe that there are more benefits to have people with high income while others believe that the government should regulate the per person income rate. this essay will discuss the both views and show why its is better to regulate per-person income. In one hand, having people with high income, helps the country’s development because most of the rich people often have high turnover businesses. Most of the time these businesses not only give jobs for the unemployed but also attract foreign investment to the country. As an example, owner of the cinnamon grand hotel chain produces many jobs for the people in sri lanka while they expand their hotels all over the country and also attract other hotel owners to invest. Moreover, high income professionals have direct impact on the country’s reputation. On the other hand, it is true that having high income people is beneficial to the country, however there is a fair chance that this will create an imbalance on per-person income rate and increase poverty. While most of the income distributed within this rich class, middle income and low-income people will suffer from it. So that government should involve to make balance to the income distribution. As an example, if government increase the base income rate, every employee can manage their expenses for country’s living expense rate. Moreover, increasing the income taxes on these high-income people while using that tax income to improve public services also be beneficial. In conclusion, although having rich people have a positive impact on the country in various ways, there is a fair chance that not all the people will benefit from that. In my opinion, government should make regulation to balance this so that not only the rich people but also the mid and low-income people benefit from it.
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and poor
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and
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some
portion of the society believe that there are more benefits to have
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people
with
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high
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income
while others believe that the
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government
should regulate the per person
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income
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rate
.
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this
essay will discuss the both views and
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show
why its is better to regulate per-person income.

In one hand, having
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people
with
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high
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income
,
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helps
the
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country’s
development
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because
most of the
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rich
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people
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often
have
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high
turnover businesses. Most of the time these businesses not
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only
give jobs for the unemployed
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but
also
attract foreign investment to the
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country
. As an example, owner of the cinnamon grand hotel chain produces
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many
jobs for the
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people
in
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sri lanka
while they expand their hotels all over the
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country
and
also
attract other hotel owners to invest.
Moreover
,
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high
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income
professionals have direct impact on the
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country’s
reputation.

On the other hand
, it is true that having
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high
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income
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people
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is
beneficial to the
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country
,
however
there is a
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fair
chance that this will create an imbalance on per-person
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income
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rate
and increase poverty. While most of the
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income
distributed within this
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rich
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class
, middle
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income
and low-income
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people
will suffer from it.
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So that
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government
should involve to
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make
balance to the
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income
distribution. As an example, if
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government
increase the base
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income
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rate
, every employee can manage their expenses for
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country’s
living expense
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rate
.
Moreover
, increasing the
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income
taxes on these high-income
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people
while using that tax
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income
to
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improve
public services
also
be beneficial.

In conclusion
, although having
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rich
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people
have a
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positive
impact on the
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country
in various ways, there is a
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fair
chance that not all the
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people
will benefit from that. In my opinion,
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government
should
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make
regulation to balance this
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so
that not
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only
the
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rich
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people
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but
also
the mid and low-income
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people
benefit from it.
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IELTS essay Some believe it is good having people with extremely high income in the country while others think government should try to limit it 1

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4 paragraphs
316 words
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