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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building what are the possible causes and solutions v.3

People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building what are the possible causes and solutions v. 3
It is true that lack of communication between the nearest will damage the strengthening of the community. In this essay we will discuss the main causes and the solutions to avoid this from getting further. I believe one of the main reasons for this is poor planning of the public infrastructure. As an example, remote towns sometimes do not have gyms or playgrounds so that residents more likely to avoid going out and do fitness activities or picnics. Another reason is poor organisation of public activities such as book fairs, festivals and weekly neighbourhood meetings and because of this, residents who lives next to each other sometimes doesn’t know who lives in next-door and this could be a very serious issue in the event of an emergency. As a solution for the above-mentioned reasons I believe improving public infrastructure will play a main role of community building. As an example, building gyms and public parks will influence the people from using these places and as a result, residents will get to know each other. While improving the public infrastructure planning, social activities such as book fairs, urban council meetings and musical shows will greatly beneficial for communities to engage in those activities as well. In conclusion, planning of public infrastructure and organising crowd activities will be beneficial to solve the main causes of damaging community building. As a citizen myself, I believe government and urban council have a great responsibility upon this issue to mitigate such issues and strengthening of the community.
It is true that lack of communication between the nearest will damage the strengthening of the
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community
. In this essay we will discuss the
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main
causes and the solutions to avoid this from getting
further
.

I believe one of the
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main
reasons for this is poor planning of the
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public
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infrastructure
. As an example, remote towns
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sometimes
do not have gyms or playgrounds
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so
that residents more likely to avoid going out and do fitness
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activities
or picnics. Another reason is poor
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organisation
of
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public
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activities
such as book fairs, festivals and weekly
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neighbourhood
meetings and
because of this
, residents who
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lives
next
to each other
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sometimes
doesn’t know who
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lives
in
next
-door and this could be a
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very
serious issue in the
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event
of an emergency.

As a solution for the above-mentioned reasons I believe improving
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public
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infrastructure
will play a
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main
role of
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community
building. As an example, building gyms and
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public
parks will influence the
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people
from using these places and
as a result
, residents will
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get
to know each other. While improving the
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public
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infrastructure
planning, social
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activities
such as book fairs, urban council meetings and musical
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shows
will
greatly
beneficial for
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communities
to engage in those
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activities
as well
.

In conclusion
, planning of
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public
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infrastructure
and
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organising
crowd
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activities
will be beneficial to solve the
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main
causes of damaging
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community
building. As a citizen myself, I believe
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government
and urban council have a great responsibility upon this issue to mitigate such issues and strengthening of the
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community
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building what are the possible causes and solutions v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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