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Air transportation is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good other believe that the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Air transportation is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good other believe that the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. v. 2
Since transportation is developing, it is directly influencing on commerce. Currently air transport is most common type of transportation to importing agricultural products from foreign countries which is throught the year. Some people claim that the best way dragging products is air transport whereas others stick to the opposite opinion. I want to discuss both sides of abovementioned topic. It is admittedly that, everything has a pros and cons, so air transport too. However it has a positive sides than negatives. Firstly, this transport supply outputs as a quickly to bidders. This will ensure that everything is on time. Secondly, it is very vital to deliver products suitable for customers. That is why tge air transport is dependable and the products will not be damaged during flight. Finally, we have to consider, this type of transports can give more conviniences for people. On the other hand, it has some kinds of disadvantages which id involved to human's exigencies. The products which come to from abroad are much expensive, in our market price. But it is essential to mention that, they are deserving to consumption. Moreover, in some cases, various illnesses can occur due to inadequate or poorly trained laboures. For instance, different bacteriums and viruses are reduced people health. Therefore everyone should be control to food-stuffs and more attention before consume them In conclusion, I would say that everything depend on carefulness. The type of transportation is not relate to the quality of products. If dispatchers can package truly his/her products, nothing will impect on the box of fruits and vegatables.
Since transportation is developing, it is
directly
influencing on commerce.
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Currently
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air
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transport
is
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most
common type of transportation to importing agricultural
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products
from foreign countries which is
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throught
the year.
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Some
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people
claim that the best way dragging
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products
is
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air
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transport
whereas others stick to the opposite opinion. I want to discuss both sides of
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abovementioned
topic.

It is
admittedly
that, everything has a pros and cons,
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so
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air
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transport
too.
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However
it has a
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positive
sides than negatives.
Firstly
, this
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transport
supply outputs as a
quickly
to bidders. This will ensure that everything is on time.
Secondly
, it is
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very
vital to deliver
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products
suitable for customers.
That is
why
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tge
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air
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transport
is dependable and the
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products
will not
be damaged
during flight.
Finally
, we
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have to
consider, this type of
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transports
can give more
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conviniences
for
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people
.

On the other hand
, it has
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some
kinds of disadvantages which id involved to
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human's exigencies
. The
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products
which
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come
to from abroad are much expensive, in our market price.
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But
it is essential to mention that, they
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are deserving
to consumption.
Moreover
, in
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some
cases, various illnesses can occur due to inadequate or
poorly
trained
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laboures
.
For instance
,
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different
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bacteriums
and viruses are
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reduced
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people
health.
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Therefore
everyone should be control to food-stuffs and more attention
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before
consume
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them


In conclusion
, I would say that everything depend on carefulness. The type of transportation is not
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relate
to the quality of
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products
. If dispatchers can package
truly
his/her
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products
, nothing will
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impect
on the box of fruits and
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vegatables
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS essay Air transportation is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say this is good other believe that the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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