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Societies benefit from international tourism and business To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Societies benefit from international tourism and business v. 2
International tourism and business has been growing popularity in recent years and been considered as one of the main dirving forces behind the development of societies. In fact, apart from its positive sides, its downsides should also be recognised. It is undeniably ture that international tourism and business promotes interaction between two countries and removes cultural barries. As people go to other countries, they are inclined to get a basic hang of local cultures and cudtomes. Local people, at the same time, try to be hospitable and warm-hearted to leave a good impression in tourists' minds. Another obvious benefit is that it stimulates economic development, especially in tourist destinations. With a large number of tourists arriving, infrastructures, such as hotel, are in desperate need to accommodate and serve them, which significantly prompts local job markets since numerous workers and service staffs are required. Desipte its advantages, its negative aspects are worth concerning. The main dismerit of internation tourism and business is that it can result in environmental degeneration in tourist spots. Since a great number of people flock into the tourist attractions, in order to supply their daily needs, cars and buses are in high demand each day to free tourists from long distance. In this way, a large amount of exhausted fumes is emitted, thereby causing poor air quality. from above analyses, the advantages brought by internation tourism and business outweigh its disadvantages. Although environmental damages could be caused in tourist spots, if tourists are educated and raised a sense of protection, the adverse effect can be minimised.
International
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tourism
and
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business
has been growing popularity in recent years and
been considered
as one of the main
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dirving
forces behind the development of societies. In fact, apart from its
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positive
sides, its downsides should
also
be
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recognised
.

It is
undeniably
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ture
that international
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tourism
and
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business
promotes interaction between two countries and removes cultural
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barries
. As
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people
go to other countries, they
are inclined
to
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get
a basic hang of local cultures and
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cudtomes
. Local
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people
, at the same time, try to be hospitable and warm-hearted to
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leave
a
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good
impression in
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tourists&
#039; minds. Another obvious benefit is that it stimulates economic development,
especially
in
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tourist
destinations. With
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a large number of
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tourists
arriving, infrastructures, such as hotel, are in desperate need to accommodate and serve them, which
significantly
prompts local job markets since numerous workers and service staffs
are required
.

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Desipte
its advantages, its
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negative
aspects are worth concerning. The main
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dismerit
of internation
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tourism
and
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business
is that it can result in environmental degeneration in
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tourist
spots. Since a great number of
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people
flock into the
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tourist
attractions, in order to supply their daily needs, cars and buses are in high demand each day to free
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tourists
from long distance. In this way, a large amount of exhausted fumes
is emitted
, thereby causing poor air quality.

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from
above analyses, the advantages brought by internation
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tourism
and
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business
outweigh its disadvantages. Although environmental damages could
be caused
in
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tourist
spots, if
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tourists
are educated
and raised a sense of protection, the adverse effect can be
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minimised
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Societies benefit from international tourism and business v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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