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Most of the poor in the world live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. The issue that tourism does not benefit the poorest is a concerning one. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life? v.1

Most of the poor in the world live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. The issue that tourism does not benefit the poorest is a concerning one. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life? v. 1
In general, it is a ubiquitous notion that almost the entire world's poor live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. Despite this factor, tourism does not benefit the poorest. There are some beneficial ways that aid to generate the income by tourism in order to ameliorate the people's lifestyle without annihilating traditional cultures. In this essay, I will cite several points as the reasons of this issue and will pursue to give some fitting solutions. One of the basic causes of this problem is that the tourism economics is not being developed in a right way. The certain organisations get lofty money from tourism and invest the gained money to this business activity again. Subsequently, the available process persists protractedly. Hence, the poor cannot take advantage of it and their difficult life condition stays at its level. As the impeccable solution to this problem is that the government should impose the rule about creating the supplementary stock for poor people. Another reason is forming from the low prices. Many tourists tend to come to the countries where the costs are cheaper. As an implication, the government cannot obtain the desirable amount of money and is obliged to soar the taxes. In this circumstance, poor people's dwelling deteriorates gradually. In addition, the numerous of tourist can contribute to altering people's cultures and it can be a much bigger inevitable problem. As a solution for these issues is that the government must increase the costs in terms of tourism economics and decline the local people's taxes. This remedy can balance both the harm and income of State easily. Taking all things into account, there are manifold reasons for this problem. However, for every hard issue, there is one solution at least.
In general
, it is a ubiquitous notion that almost the entire world's
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poor
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live
in countries where
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tourism
is a growing industry. Despite this factor,
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tourism
does not benefit the poorest. There are
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some
beneficial ways that aid to generate the income by
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tourism
in order to ameliorate the
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people's
lifestyle without annihilating traditional cultures. In this essay, I will cite several points as the reasons of this issue and will pursue to give
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some
fitting solutions.

One of the basic causes of this
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problem
is that the
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tourism
economics is not
being developed
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in a right way
. The certain
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organisations
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get
lofty money from
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tourism
and invest the gained money to this business activity again.
Subsequently
, the available process persists
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protractedly
.
Hence
, the
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poor
cannot take advantage of it and their difficult life condition stays at its level. As the impeccable solution to this
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problem
is that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should impose the
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rule
about creating the supplementary stock for
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poor
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people
.

Another reason is forming from the low prices.
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Many
tourists tend to
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come
to the countries where the costs are cheaper. As an implication, the
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government
cannot obtain the desirable amount of money and
is obliged
to soar the taxes. In this circumstance,
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poor
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people's
dwelling deteriorates
gradually
.
In addition
,
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the numerous of
tourist can contribute to altering
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people's
cultures and it can be a much bigger inevitable
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problem
. As a solution for these issues is that the
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government
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must
increase the costs in terms of
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tourism
economics and decline the local
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people's
taxes. This remedy can balance both the harm and income of State
easily
.

Taking all things into account, there are manifold reasons for this
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problem
.
However
, for every
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hard
issue, there is one solution at least.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Most of the poor in the world live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. The issue that tourism does not benefit the poorest is a concerning one. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
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