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Writing task 2 (an essay)Internet contains a lot of information, however, sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Writing task 2 (an essay)Internet contains a lot of information, however, sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong. v. 1
Nowadays people got used to all technologies and use them in routine to make own' s lives much more convenient, but one of the most significant breakthroughs always was the Internet. We use the Internet everywhere, but to what extent do we depend on it? I entirely agree that most of our everyday comforts are made by the Internet and I will attempt to outline some key features for this. First and most obvious is our communication. Today it is much easier to contact anyone from any place in the world only using the Internet, what is more astonishing, we can even see the face of our partner and use voice to talk in realtime, whilst our ancestors did not have such an amazing opportunity. Second thing, improved by the Internet, is shopping. You can freely buy anything worldwide with no exceptions and enjoy it on the next day, you only need to have a bank account and be ready to spend some money. Finally, there are also lots of dangerous things. In fact, you can easily lose all your money, be a part of fraud or face much worse situation. There are lots of reports about people, who lost everything or was arrested because of repost. Using Internet can be too risky, but if you will be careful, nothing serious will happen with you. In conclusion, I would agree that our life became much more convenient, thanks to the Internet, but there is also the other side of that coin, which can spoil all honey.
Nowadays
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people
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got
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to all technologies and
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use
them in routine to
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make
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much
more convenient,
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but
one of the most significant breakthroughs always was the Internet. We
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use
the Internet everywhere,
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but
to what extent do we depend on it? I
entirely
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agree
that most of our everyday comforts
are made
by the Internet and I will attempt to outline
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some
key features for this.

First
and most obvious is our communication.
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Today
it is
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much
easier to contact anyone from any place in the world
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only
using the Internet,
what is more
astonishing, we can even
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see
the face of our partner and
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use
voice to talk in
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realtime
, whilst our ancestors did not have such an amazing opportunity.

Second thing,
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improved
by the Internet, is shopping. You can
freely
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buy
anything worldwide with no exceptions and enjoy it on the
next
day, you
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only
need to have a bank account and be ready to spend
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some
money.

Finally
, there are
also
lots of
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dangerous
things. In fact, you can
easily
lose all your money, be a part of fraud or face
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
worse situation. There are lots of reports about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, who lost everything or
was arrested
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because
of repost. Using Internet can be too risky,
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but
if you will be careful, nothing serious will happen
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with
you.

In conclusion
, I would
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agree
that our life became
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much
more convenient, thanks to the Internet,
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but
there is
also
the other side of that coin, which can spoil all honey.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Writing task 2 (an essay)Internet contains a lot of information, however, sometimes this information is inaccurate or wrong. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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