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‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. ’ v.4

‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. with this statement? ’ v. 4
With the spread of internet and technology, social media has become a vital part of our life. Sites such as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter are gaining popularity not only among the youth but also older age groups. With this being said, critics are arguing that these sites provide a channel for criminal activity and hence have more disadvantages than advantages. Cyber bullying justifies the negatives associated with social media. Although punishable by law, it is a very common form of internet crime. Spreading hate, mockery and publicly embarrassing the victim against his will has serious mental impacts and in many cases also leads to depression and social anxiety. Moreover, the privacy policies of such sites, especially Facebook, poses some critical issues to the safety of private information. Facebook, for example, had a significant security breach in 2013 which led to a large amount of personal information ending up in the wrong hands, some of which criminals too. Be that as it may, these networking applications have transformed the world of communication for good, thereby making confabulations convenient, effortless and almost free of charge. Speaking to your grandmother in another corner of the world does not cost an arm and a leg and can be done with one tap now. Furthermore, being good sources of entertainment and interaction, they have spread information beyond the limits of the universe that otherwise would have taken years to disperse. In addition, these platforms are central to numerous social, political and ethical discussions. The environmental crisis, for example, is gaining more momentum on Instagram than in real life. This exchange of ideas has integrated the world and benefitted millions. In conclusion, even though social media has some negative connotations, I disagree that social networking sites have more negative effects than positive. It is clear that the benefits that these sites have provided us with are irreplaceable and as for the problems associated with them, we can always take measures to minimise or eliminate them.
With the spread of internet and technology,
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social
media has become a vital part of our life.
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Sites
such as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter are gaining popularity not
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only
among the youth
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but
also
older age groups. With this
being said
, critics are arguing that these
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sites
provide a channel for criminal activity and
hence
have more disadvantages than advantages.

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Cyber bullying
justifies the negatives associated with
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social
media. Although punishable by law, it is a
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very
common form of internet crime. Spreading hate, mockery and
publicly
embarrassing the victim against his will has serious mental impacts and in
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many
cases
also
leads to depression and
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social
anxiety.
Moreover
, the privacy policies of such
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sites
,
especially
Facebook, poses
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some
critical issues to the safety of private information. Facebook,
for example
, had a significant security breach in 2013 which led to a large amount of personal information ending up in the
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wrong
hands,
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some
of which criminals too.

Be that as it may, these networking applications have transformed the world of communication for
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good
, thereby making confabulations convenient, effortless and almost free of charge. Speaking to your grandmother in another corner of the world does not cost an arm and a leg and can
be done
with one tap
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now
.
Furthermore
, being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
sources of entertainment and interaction, they have spread information beyond the limits of the universe that
otherwise
would have taken years to disperse.
In addition
, these platforms are central to numerous
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social
, political and ethical discussions. The environmental crisis,
for example
, is gaining more momentum on Instagram than in real life. This exchange of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
has integrated the world and
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benefitted
millions.

In conclusion
,
even though
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social
media has
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some
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negative
connotations, I disagree that
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social
networking
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sites
have more
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negative
effects than
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positive
. It is
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clear
that the benefits that these
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sites
have provided us with are irreplaceable and as for the problems associated with them, we can always take measures to
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minimise
or eliminate them.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
The limits of my language are the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay ‘Social networking sites such as Facebook and Twitter are observed to have more negative effects than positive being more useful for the criminals than others. with this statement? ’ v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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