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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. v.7

Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 7
Undoubtedly, everyone will agree that smoking is injurious to health. Both active and passive smokers are affected due to the smoke of cigarette. Hence, many people have an opinion to ban smoking in public area. This essay will explain my position to fully agree with this idea. One of the prominent reasons is if this ban is imposed, people’s well-being will improve. Asthma and short breath are common diseases diagnosed in smokers and people around them. This can be reduced as the smokers will have to go in private, reducing the number of times he/she smokes. Moreover, the family members or dear ones will also be in a less smoky area helping them to improve their health. A good example of this is, Information Technology (I. T. ) professionals are usually observed to go for a smoke break with their working-peers, where even non-smokers participate. As a result, both the groups have a detrimental effect on their health whereas this restriction will not allow them to smoke outside and will result in maintaining their health. Another reason to support the idea is this prohibition will promote smokers to stop smoking. Although many people try to quit smoking, they are unable to achieve because of easy accessibility and availability. While this law imposed people will not be allowed in social and thus will decrease the number of cigarettes an individual smoked in each day. Recent surveys conducted by the Human Health Department, India, show that 80% of the smoking population tries to quit at least once in their lifetime, however, they are unable to achieve. However, this law will help them reduce or quit because even the sellers will have to abide by the rule. To conclude, restriction of smoking publicly helps both the smoker as well as the non-smokers through improving their energy and by reducing the number of cigarettes and individual smokes. I believe the government should incorporate long-run rules and run campaigns so that citizens will be aware of the consequences. Consecutively, it will improve well-being index of the country.
Undoubtedly
, everyone will
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agree
that
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smoking
is injurious to
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health
. Both active and passive smokers are
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affected
due to the
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smoke
of cigarette.
Hence
,
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many
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people
have an opinion to ban
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smoking
in public area. This essay will
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explain
my position to
fully
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agree
with this
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idea
.

One of the prominent reasons is if this ban
is imposed
,
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people’s
well-being will
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improve
. Asthma and short breath are common diseases diagnosed in smokers and
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people
around them. This can be
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reduced
as the smokers will
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have to
go in private, reducing the number of times he/she
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smokes
.
Moreover
, the family members or dear ones will
also
be in a less smoky area helping them to
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improve
their
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health
. A
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good
example of this is, Information Technology (I. T.
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)
professionals are
usually
observed to go for a
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smoke
break with their working-peers, where even non-smokers participate.
As a result
, both the groups have a detrimental effect on their
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health
whereas this restriction will not
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allow
them to
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smoke
outside and will result in maintaining their health.

Another reason to support the
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idea
is this prohibition will promote smokers to
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stop
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smoking
. Although
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many
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people
try to quit
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smoking
, they are unable to achieve
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because
of easy accessibility and availability. While this law imposed
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people
will not be
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allowed
in social and
thus
will decrease the number of cigarettes an individual smoked in each day. Recent surveys conducted by the Human
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Health
Department, India,
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show
that 80% of the
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smoking
population tries to quit at least once in their lifetime,
however
, they are unable to achieve.
However
, this law will
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help
them
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reduce
or quit
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because
even the sellers will
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have to
abide by the
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rule
.

To conclude
, restriction of
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smoking
publicly
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helps
both the smoker
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as well as
the non-smokers through improving their energy and by reducing the number of cigarettes and individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
smokes
. I believe the
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government
should incorporate long-run
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rules
and run campaigns
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so
that citizens will be aware of the consequences.
Consecutively
, it will
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improve
well-being index of the country.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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