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Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.5

Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 5
Smoking is hazardous to health, as it is said 'smoking kills'. But not only it has adverse effects on the people actively smoking, it affects the passive smokers to a great extent. It is a debatable topic whether cigarette usage should be prohibited in public places. In the essay, I'll share views on whether smoking should be disallowed in open places or not. According to a study of Columbia University, it has been found that 40% of the patients who had lung diseases or breathing problems never smoked. However, they were more in contact with the people who were chain-smokers. It is clearly evident that the mere presence in tobacco flavoured air is slow poison which leads to life threatening ailments. Public places should be protected from being death grounds for well being of mankind. The other view point can be if no smoking in public or open places, is it safe to smoke indoors or privately? Another research by the Illinois University has claimed that most of the house fire accidents that occurred in recent past months were due to indoor smoking. Along with it, if smoking gets banned. It will drastically affect the taxes and revenue scenario for the government, ultimately reflecting on the economy. Whatsoever be the overall scene, I strongly speak in favour of the ban on smoking, not only in the people gathering areas, but also anywhere else. Production of tobacco related products should not be given any license as health is the real wealth.
Smoking
is hazardous to health, as it
is said
'smoking kills'.
But
not
only
it has adverse effects on the
people
actively
smoking
, it affects the passive smokers to a great extent. It is a debatable topic whether cigarette usage should
be prohibited
in public
places
. In the essay, I'll share views on whether
smoking
should
be disallowed
in open
places
or not.

According to a study of Columbia University, it has
been found
that 40% of the patients who had lung diseases or breathing problems never smoked.
However
, they were more in contact with the
people
who were chain-smokers. It is
clearly
evident that the mere presence in tobacco
flavoured
air is slow poison which leads to life threatening ailments. Public
places
should
be protected
from being death grounds for
well being
of mankind.

The other view point can be if no
smoking
in public or open
places
, is it safe to smoke indoors or
privately
? Another research by the Illinois University has claimed that most of the
house
fire accidents that occurred in recent past months were due to indoor
smoking
. Along with it, if
smoking
gets
banned. It will
drastically
affect the taxes and revenue scenario for the
government
,
ultimately
reflecting on the economy.

Whatsoever be the
overall
scene, I
strongly
speak in
favour
of the ban on
smoking
, not
only
in the
people
gathering areas,
but
also
anywhere else. Production of tobacco related products should not be
given
any license as health is the real wealth.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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