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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 4
Smoking is injurious to health. Not only it has a deteriorating effect on a person who is actively doing it, but also for those who are in the vicinity of him/her. To curtail the enlarging negative consequences this practice should be strictly banned in public places. I am in strong agreement with this statement. Smoking is a type of acute addiction, that for sure is having all sorts of negative implications for a person directly involved in it. For instance, common cases of lung cancer and mouth ulcers have become a matter of serious concern. Chain smokers are having their lives at greater risk. This problem has percolated much deeper than we think. People who are not into this vice, are passively affected. The smoke that comes from the cigarettes when inhaled by non-smokers is posing a grave threat to their physical well-being. Even though many are aware of the fact that this could lead to immense financial losses too, but they seem to be reluctant to accept. In public places, people hardly follow rules and hence feel free to exhale those poisonous fumes out of their mouths. At common places small children waiting at their bus-stops, expecting mothers and elderly are easy prey to this annoying habit. People should understand that there might be some asthmatic patients too, so there should be a complete prohibition of this. In spite of campaigns and advertisements, the problem is still increasing and therefore air quality index is going from bad to worse. In conclusion, we should be thoughtful of our acts and actions. In order to understand the gravity of the situation, this is a high time that we unanimously agree that this is not a kind of style statement. We should think about the people around us and play the part of a responsible citizen. So whether anybody is actively or passively involved, health is surely getting deteriorated.
Smoking is injurious to health. Not
only
it has a deteriorating effect on a person who is
actively
doing it,
but
also
for those who are in the vicinity of him/her. To curtail the enlarging
negative
consequences this practice should be
strictly
banned in public places. I am in strong agreement with this statement.

Smoking is a type of acute addiction, that for sure is having all sorts of
negative
implications for a person
directly
involved in it.
For instance
, common cases of lung cancer and mouth ulcers have become a matter of serious concern. Chain smokers are having their
lives
at greater
risk
.

This problem has percolated much deeper than we
think
.
People
who are not into this vice, are
passively
affected
. The smoke that
comes
from the cigarettes when inhaled by non-smokers is posing a grave threat to their physical well-being.
Even though
many
are aware of the fact that this could lead to immense financial losses too,
but
they seem to be reluctant to accept.

In public places,
people
hardly follow
rules
and
hence
feel free to exhale those poisonous fumes out of their mouths. At common places
small
children waiting at their bus-
stops
, expecting mothers and elderly are easy prey to this annoying habit.
People
should understand that there might be
some
asthmatic patients too,
so
there should be a complete prohibition of this.
In spite of
campaigns and advertisements, the problem is
still
increasing and
therefore
air quality index is going from
bad
to worse.

In conclusion
, we should be thoughtful of our acts and actions.
In
order to understand the gravity of the situation, this is a high time that we
unanimously
agree
that this is not a kind of style statement. We should
think
about the
people
around us and play the part of a responsible citizen.
So
whether anybody is
actively
or
passively
involved, health is
surely
getting deteriorated.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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