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Smacking children is the best way of discipline. To what extent do u agree or disagree? v.1

Smacking children is the best way of discipline. v. 1
Discipline helps you to control your urges, stay on the path of your goals and provides a structure to your life. Transition in the methods to impart discipline, tells us that there can be multiple ways to achieve it. Smacking children might have done the trick in the past, but today we can resort to various other options at hand. In today's world of connectivity and democracy, smacking children could leave them thinking that are being deprived of their right of opinion and ease of social connectivity being the catalyst to compare with other forms of imparting discipline. Many times children compare their lives with their friends and the variance in the methods could lead them to not believe in discipline altogether. Also with options such incentivising good behaviour, non-violent restriction on bad behaviour and online guide to various other studies could help us achieve discipline as effectively as smacking. Families have also started using examples of online statistics and making the child understand their mistake in a more opaque fashion. Evidently, many methods have failed in the past and smacking has been useful in those times. Every born individual of the 20th century, might have received a spanking for discipline, proving it to be an effective way. Even military training centres, the home of the most disciplined people in the world use smacking as one their strategies, but the application could be contextual. Whenever we fail to impart the intended discipline we might resort smacking as a way to set a strong waypoint for behaviour, but that might not be the only way. In conclusion, I would like to say, change is the only constant, and with the disposal of the internet enabling us to refer so many options, I think smacking for discipline should also be changed.
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Discipline
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helps
you to control your urges, stay on the path of your goals and provides a structure to your life. Transition in the methods to impart
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discipline
,
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tells
us that there can be multiple ways to achieve it. Smacking children
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might
have done the trick in the past,
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but
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today
we can resort to various other options at hand.

In
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today
's world of connectivity and democracy, smacking children could
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leave
them thinking that are
being deprived
of their right of opinion and
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ease
of social connectivity being the catalyst to compare with other forms of imparting
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discipline
.
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Many
times children compare their
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lives
with their friends and the variance in the methods could lead them to not believe in
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discipline
altogether.
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Also
with options such
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incentivising
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good
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behaviour
, non-violent restriction on
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bad
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behaviour
and online guide to various other studies could
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help
us achieve
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discipline
as
effectively
as smacking. Families have
also
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started
using examples of online statistics and making the child understand their mistake in a more opaque fashion.

Evidently
,
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many
methods have failed in the past and smacking has been useful in those times.

Every born individual of the 20th century,
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might
have received a spanking for
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discipline
, proving it to be an effective way. Even military training
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centres
, the home of the most disciplined
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people
in the world
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use
smacking as one their strategies,
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but
the application could be contextual. Whenever we fail to impart the intended
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discipline
we
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might
resort smacking as a way to set a strong waypoint for
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behaviour
,
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but
that
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might
not be the
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only
way.

In conclusion
, I would like to say,
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change
is the
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only
constant, and with the disposal of the internet enabling us to refer
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so
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many
options, I
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think
smacking for
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discipline
should
also
be
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changed
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Smacking children is the best way of discipline. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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