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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. v.2

Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. v. 2
Our society is not an ideal. Different kinds of families live there. We see daily, many cases of the gender discrimination in our society and also the issues due to the poverty. There are many causes, why abortion cases are increasing. Some of the causes are; family pressure, poverty, unwanted pregnancy, issues in the fetus and many more. If we look overall, we will see, few cases are legitimate, but many abortion incidents are illegal. People are illegally going for an abortion due to their own reasons. But, if it becomes legal then it will be more misused rather than used. Firstly, female foeticide, this is a major issue in the families. Some people don't want female in their family and they give their own logic to justify it. This is a completely illegal practise going on in some countries. For example, Abortion was not illegal in India, but due to increased cases of female foeticide, the government made it illegal. So, if it had been legal, it would have been impossible to stop the misuse. Secondly, there are many genuine reasons, where abortion is actually needed to save the life of the mother. For example, the cases, where issues in foetus and the cases where pregnancy is life threatening, etc. For example, there was a case in any country, where family knew that the born kid will not survive after birth and life of the mother will be in danger while delivery. In this case, abortion justified. But that family struggled to get permission from the respective authority as abortion was not legal in that country. In summary, abortion is disputed topic and growing due to issues in the society. Very few people, those are advocating it to be legal because they just want to avoid the issues in genuine cases. Most of the members in the society are not in favour of the abortion becasue they know the consequences. So, it must not be legal and should be done in rarest of the rare cases.
Our
society
is not an ideal.
Different
kinds of
families
live
there. We
see
daily,
many
cases of the gender discrimination in our
society
and
also
the
issues
due
to the poverty.

There are
many
causes, why
abortion
cases are increasing.
Some of the
causes are;
family
pressure, poverty, unwanted pregnancy,
issues
in the fetus and
many
more. If we look
overall
, we will
see
, few cases are legitimate,
but
many
abortion
incidents are
illegal
.
People
are
illegally
going for an
abortion
due
to their
own
reasons.
But
, if it becomes
legal
then it will be more misused
rather
than
used
.

Firstly
, female
foeticide
, this is a major
issue
in the
families
.
Some
people
don't want female in their
family and
they give their
own
logic to justify it. This is a completely
illegal
practise
going on in
some
countries.
For example
,
Abortion
was not
illegal
in India,
but
due
to increased cases of female
foeticide
, the
government
made it
illegal
.
So
, if it had been
legal
, it would have been impossible to
stop
the misuse.

Secondly
, there are
many
genuine reasons, where
abortion
is actually needed to save the life of the mother.
For example
, the cases, where
issues
in
foetus
and the cases where pregnancy is life threatening, etc.
For example
, there was a case in any country, where
family
knew that the born kid will not survive after birth and life of the mother will be in
danger
while delivery.
In this case
,
abortion
justified.
But
that
family
struggled to
get
permission from the respective authority as
abortion
was not
legal
in that country.

In summary,
abortion
is disputed
topic and growing
due
to
issues
in the
society
.
Very
few
people
, those are advocating it to be
legal
because
they
just
want to avoid the
issues
in genuine cases. Most of the members in the
society
are not in
favour
of the
abortion
becasue
they know the consequences.
So
, it
must
not be
legal
and should
be done
in rarest of the rare cases.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
337 words
6
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