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Smacking children is best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Smacking children is best form of discipline. v. 1
The practice of moulding errant children into proper behaviour by smacking them is an age-long tradition that is gradually losing its popularity in the society. Some people are of the opinion that smacking children is the best method of instilling discipline in children. This essay will argue why smacking children is absolutely the best way to discipline children despite some potential demerits. Some parents believe that smacking children is actually a potentially dangerous and ineffective method of raising children. They claim that this method tends to dehumanize the children once they get used to beating. Also, they believe that there is a chance of injuring the children, both physically and psychologically when things get out of hand. For instance, there have been recorded cases of children developing even more unruly behaviours once they adapt to the practice. Their minds are already programmed to expect the usual and that makes them less wary of the punishment. So the desired purpose of smacking them is defeated in the long run. Examples like these have bolstered the existing distaste in parents for this practice. Hence, their opinion that the method is the worst considerable option of raising a child. However, the claim that smacking children is an unnecessary method of raising a child is completely ridiculous. It has been evident since time immemorial that a typical child has a natural tendency to misbehave, unless the child is aware of painful consequences that the mischief will attract. Children are naturally scared of pain and they would do anything possible to avoid it. Studies have shown that eight out of every ten children stifle the urge to badly behave simply because they fear being smacked for their actions, especially when they have had a similar experience in the past. This goes to show how effective corporal punishment can be towards making a child well-behaved, even in the absence of the parents. A parent only needs to smack a child on a few occasions before the fear of a reoccurrence automatically guides the child's conduct. In conclusion, this essay argued that parents who are against smacking children are grossly misinformed about the subject and they underestimate the effectiveness of the practice. In my opinion, smacking children is absolutely the most effective method of instilling discipline in children despite the minor risks associated.
The
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practice
of
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moulding
errant
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children
into proper
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behaviour
by smacking them is an age-long tradition
that is
gradually
losing its popularity in the society.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that smacking
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children
is the best
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method
of instilling discipline in
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children
. This essay will argue why smacking
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children
is
absolutely
the best way to discipline
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children
despite
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some
potential demerits.

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Some
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parents
believe that smacking
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children
is actually a
potentially
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dangerous
and ineffective
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method
of raising
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children
. They claim that this
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method
tends to dehumanize the
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children
once they
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get
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used
to beating.
Also
, they believe that there is a chance of injuring the
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children
, both
physically
and
psychologically
when things
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get
out of hand.
For instance
, there have
been recorded
cases of
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children
developing even more
unruly
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behaviours
once they adapt to the
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practice
. Their minds are already programmed to
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expect
the usual and that
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makes
them less wary of the punishment.
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So
the desired purpose of smacking them
is defeated
in the long run. Examples like these have bolstered the existing distaste in
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parents
for this
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practice
.
Hence
, their opinion that the
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method
is the worst considerable option of raising a child.

However
, the claim that smacking
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children
is an unnecessary
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method
of raising a
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child
is completely ridiculous. It has been evident since time immemorial that a typical
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child
has a natural tendency to misbehave, unless the
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child
is aware of painful consequences that the mischief will attract.
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Children
are
naturally
scared of
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pain and
they would do anything possible to avoid it. Studies have shown that eight out of every ten
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children
stifle the urge to
badly
behave
simply
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because
they fear
being smacked
for their actions,
especially
when they have had a similar experience in the past. This goes to
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show
how effective corporal punishment can be towards making a
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child
well-behaved, even in the absence of the
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parents
. A
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parent
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only
needs to smack a
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child
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on a few occasions
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before
the fear of a reoccurrence
automatically
guides the child's conduct.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that
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parents
who are against smacking
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children
are
grossly
misinformed about the
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subject and
they underestimate the effectiveness of the
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practice
. In my opinion, smacking
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children
is
absolutely
the most effective
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method
of instilling discipline in
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children
despite the minor
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risks
associated.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Smacking children is best form of discipline. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
386 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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