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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.10

Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. v. 10
In recent times, many people frequently claim that young people are able to learn more effectively while they are watching TVs. Although in some cases, televisions make people inactive, personally, I completely agree with the view that televisions can help students to expand their knowledge. In this essay I will first look through what certain TV channels might be useful for students to learn and secondly, I will examine why watching television at home can reduce the children's stress. There two main reasons why I believe that televisions are extremely beneficial for children. The main one is that students can find a whole host of helpful TV channels such as National Geographic and Animal Planet, which are extremely fascinating to watch. This opportunity, in my opinion, must significantly increase students' knowledge in one subject, namely Biology. Another point to consider is that watching TVs can diminish the stress that young people are vulnerable to get at school. If, for example, a child has received a bad mark in a particular subject, and then, classmates will probably mock at him or her. As a result, I would argue that in some cases, televisions might be useful. On the other hand, I believe that we must not encourage children to constantly watch TVs because they enable young people to become less active. This can be seen by the number of studies which has already proved that televisions make people not only inactive but also obese. Although televisions are able to make young people less active, I think that many schools have physical education lessons. In conclusion, TVs can be certainly useful for students to learn. In my own view, I feel strongly that televisions have a lot of benefits for some reason that I have discussed above. And I hope schools will establish such kind of method of teaching
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many
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people
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young
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people
are able to learn more
effectively
while they are watching TVs. Although in
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some
cases,
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televisions
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make
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people
inactive,
personally
, I completely
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agree
with the view that
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televisions
can
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help
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students
to expand their knowledge. In this essay I will
first
look through what certain TV channels might be useful for
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students
to learn and
secondly
, I will examine why watching
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television
at home can
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reduce
the children's
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stress
.

There two main reasons why I believe that
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televisions
are
extremely
beneficial for children. The main one is that
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students
can find a whole host of helpful TV channels such as National Geographic and Animal Planet, which are
extremely
fascinating to
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watch
. This opportunity, in my opinion,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
significantly
increase students' knowledge in one subject,
namely
Biology. Another point to consider is that watching TVs can diminish the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
that
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young
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people
are vulnerable to
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get
at school. If,
for example
, a child has received a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
mark in a particular subject, and then, classmates will
probably
mock at him or her.
As a result
, I would argue that in
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some
cases,
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televisions
might be useful.

On the other hand
, I believe that we
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must
not encourage children to
constantly
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watch
TVs
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because
they enable
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young
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people
to become less active. This can be
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seen
by the number of studies which has already proved that
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televisions
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make
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people
not
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only
inactive
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but
also
obese. Although
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televisions
are able to
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make
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young
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people
less active, I
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think
that
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many
schools have physical education lessons.

In conclusion
, TVs can be
certainly
useful for
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students
to learn. In my
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own
view, I feel
strongly
that
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televisions
have
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a lot of
benefits for
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some
reason that I have discussed above. And I hope schools will establish such kind of method of
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teaching
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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