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since traveling abroad became relatively inexpensive more countries opened their doors for foreign tourists. is it a positive or negative trend? give your opinion and include relevant examples v.1

since traveling abroad became relatively inexpensive more countries opened their doors for foreign tourists. is it a positive or negative trend? give your opinion and include relevant examples v. 1
Undoubtedly, these days, climate alterations are happening extremely. It is often argued that either people have to find a way to avoid weather changes or must try to live in these horrible situations. I fully agree with this fact that although people can adapt themselves to climate changes, it is better to keep weather circumstances constant. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing climate remodeling is better than finding a way of living in this situation. On the one hand, the more climate alters, the more life becomes harder. That is to say that people gained the capability to adapt themselves to the present climate within the millions of years, thus they cannot live easily with increased temperature, which happened recently. As a strategy, people can plant trees to decrease global warming, which nowadays is being converted to a serious problem. Trees are unthinkably capable to reduce the temperature and are able to absorb the CO2 (carbon dioxide), which in high concentrations can damage human body cells and eventually leads to cell death. For instance, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are extremely rare. In my opinion, enhancement of trees cultivation can secure the survival of planet Earth. To sum up, tree cultivation can help people to prevent the climate change, significantly. On the other hand, the more consumption of fossil fuels, the more changing climate. Some people declare that consumption of fossil fuels increase the atmospheric pollutants as well as the weather temperature causing several damages to the environment. Hence, for preventing climate changes, consumption of fossil fuels must be reduced. For example, in the recent decade that the weather temperature of the world became warmer by up to 2 oC, the rate of fires increased by up to 12%. So, usage of fossil fuels is considered as the main agent of global warming. I believe that consumption of fossil fuels must be reduced by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens. To take something into consideration, in some situations, people can also adapt themselves with difficult environmental conditions not easily but hardly. To summarize, some people are of the opinion that modification of climate change can happen easily, while others are opposed to this view. I am sure that the enhancement of trees cultivation and reduction of consuming fossil fuels can help people to avoid the climate changes.
Undoubtedly
, these days,
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climate
alterations are happening
extremely
. It is
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often
argued that either
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people
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have to
find a way to avoid
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weather
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changes
or
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must
try to
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live
in these horrible situations. I
fully
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agree
with this fact that although
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people
can adapt themselves to
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climate
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changes
, it is better to
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keep
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weather
circumstances constant. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing
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climate
remodeling is better than finding a way of living in this situation.

On the one hand, the more
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climate
alters, the more life becomes harder.
That is
to say that
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people
gained the capability to adapt themselves to the present
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climate
within the millions of years,
thus
they cannot
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live
easily
with increased
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temperature
, which happened recently. As a strategy,
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people
can plant
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trees
to decrease global warming, which nowadays is
being converted
to a serious problem.
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Trees
are
unthinkably
capable to
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reduce
the
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temperature
and are able to absorb the CO2 (carbon dioxide), which in high concentrations can damage human body cells and
eventually
leads to cell death.
For instance
, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are
extremely
rare. In my opinion, enhancement of
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trees
cultivation can secure the survival of planet Earth. To sum up,
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tree
cultivation can
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help
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people
to
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prevent
the
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climate
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change
,
significantly
.

On the other hand
, the more
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
, the more changing
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climate
.
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Some
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people
declare that
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
increase the atmospheric pollutants
as well
as the
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weather
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temperature
causing several damages to the environment.
Hence
, for preventing
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climate
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changes
,
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
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must
be
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reduced
.
For example
, in the recent decade that the
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weather
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temperature
of the world became warmer by up to 2
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oC
, the rate of fires increased by up to 12%.
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So
, usage of
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fossil
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fuels
is considered
as the main agent of global warming. I believe that
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
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must
be
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reduced
by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens. To take something into consideration, in
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some
situations,
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people
can
also
adapt themselves with difficult environmental conditions not
easily
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but
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hardly
.

To summarize
,
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some
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people
are of the opinion that modification of
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climate
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change
can happen
easily
, while others
are opposed
to this view. I am sure that the enhancement of
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trees
cultivation and reduction of consuming
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fossil
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fuels
can
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help
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people
to avoid the
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climate
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changes
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay since traveling abroad became relatively inexpensive more countries opened their doors for foreign tourists. is it a positive or negative trend? give your opinion and include relevant examples v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
400 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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