People have different views on how young citizens should plan their future. Some assert that they should copy the older generations’ path. While I would agree with others who encourage young people to think differently.
The fact that young people could better fit in society is one of the reasons why people are in favour of following tradition. This because in many countries, people still have a stereotype of what a woman or man should do, and following this stereotype will make an individual more acceptable in society. For example, many girls want to be an elementary school teacher or a nurse, as these jobs are the most ideal jobs for a female. And women who conduct these jobs are the most popular ones in the marriage market. Therefore, following the tradition is beneficial to become popular in society.
Nevertheless, I agree with people who believe challenging old traditions is a better choice. The reason is that people live in an ever-changing world, which means what worked before might not work in modern society. For instance, in the past, people believed that men and women should get married in their 20s, however, this is impractical to modern young couples. This is because most young citizens are either busy with pursuing a higher degree or building up their careers in their 20s. Starting a family at such an early age will make these ambitious young people lose chances to achieve their potential and become less competitive in society.
In conclusion, it is true that follow the old steps will benefit people in some way, but I would argue young generations should try to make changes, as only by doing this, they can keep up with fast development of the world, and become more competent in society.
People
have
different
views on how
young
citizens should plan their future.
Some
assert that they should copy the older generations’ path.
While
I would
agree
with others who encourage
young
people
to
think
differently
.
The fact that
young
people
could better fit in
society
is one of the reasons why
people
are in
favour
of following tradition. This
because
in
many
countries,
people
still
have a stereotype of what a woman or
man
should do, and following this stereotype will
make
an individual more acceptable in
society
.
For example
,
many
girls want to be an elementary school teacher or a nurse, as these jobs are the most ideal jobs for a female. And women who conduct these jobs are the most popular ones in the marriage market.
Therefore
, following the tradition is beneficial to become popular in society.
Nevertheless
, I
agree
with
people
who believe challenging
old
traditions is a better choice. The reason is that
people
live
in an ever-changing world, which means what worked
before
might not work in modern
society
.
For instance
, in the past,
people
believed that
men
and women should
get
married in their 20s,
however
, this is impractical to modern
young
couples. This is
because
most
young
citizens are either busy with pursuing a higher degree or building up their careers in their 20s. Starting a family at such an early age will
make
these ambitious
young
people
lose chances to achieve their potential and become less competitive in society.
In conclusion
, it is true that follow the
old
steps will benefit
people
in
some
way,
but
I would argue
young
generations should try to
make
changes
, as
only
by doing this, they can
keep
up with
fast
development of the world, and become more competent in
society
.
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