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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth amoung poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? v.2

It is fact that since last 2-3 decades, a lots of people have been living under poverty line in some countries throughout the world. I opine that rich and developed countries ought to spent their income to the poor countries by giving life living things as well as in other fields. However, Poor countries should not depend on well-developed countries but government have to also give attention to their residents. There are number of countries whose economies are developing and underdeveloped. The governments of richer countries should contribute their money in poorer countries by produced food, clothes and necessity of life things. Moreover, They can also give education services and innumerable employment opportunities. For instance, The international students are going to foreign for study because of lack of education facilities and employment. On the other hand, There is no any obstacles to give support to the poorer countries, but their governments would be focused on their nation in order to reduce poverty. They should be developed small trade and commerce in order that employee can get a chance to work and earn money to run their homes. Organizing a less fees schools and colleges, so student can obtain the education and may become eligible to do job or business. The another alternative is to reduced the cost of taxes in order thatcitizens are being able to fulfillment their requirements easily. For example, Reduced the cost of GST from some products. To conclude, I firmly believe that take the help from wealthy nations is the best support to decrease the proportion of poverty but governments also prefer to some appropriate actions to control the poverty.
It is fact that since last 2-3 decades,
a lots
of
people
have been living under
poverty
line in
some
countries
throughout the world. I opine that rich and developed
countries
ought to spent their income to the poor
countries
by giving life living things
as well
as in other fields.
However
, Poor
countries
should not depend on well-developed
countries
but
government
have to
also
give attention to their residents.

There are
number of
countries
whose economies are developing and underdeveloped. The
governments
of richer
countries
should contribute their money in poorer
countries
by produced food, clothes and necessity of life things.
Moreover
, They can
also
give education services and innumerable employment opportunities.
For instance
, The international students are going to
foreign
for study
because
of lack of education facilities and employment.

On the other hand
, There is
no
any obstacles to give support to the poorer
countries
,
but
their
governments
would
be focused
on their nation in order to
reduce
poverty
. They should
be developed
small
trade and commerce in order that employee can
get
a chance to work and earn money to run their homes. Organizing a
less
fees schools and colleges,
so
student can obtain the education and may become eligible to do job or business. The another alternative is to
reduced
the cost of taxes in order
thatcitizens
are being able to fulfillment their requirements
easily
.
For example
,
Reduced
the cost of GST from
some
products.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that take the
help
from wealthy nations is the best support to decrease the proportion of
poverty
but
governments
also
prefer to
some
appropriate actions to control the
poverty
.
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IELTS essay Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.0
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