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Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v.6

Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 6
It is often said that nowadays taking advice from older individuals as opposed to youngsters are becoming a common phenomenon in some countries. However, I reckon to consult with younger individuals rather than old people. Here, I will bring both sides of the statements. There are many positive side to go for counselling with old people. To begin, old individuals are very experienced with everything, they can provide good guidance to everyone. Hence, young residents could shape their knowledge levels and skills, as well as they are an ideal person to educate about ethics. According to psychology, it is obvious that old citizens are ideal mentor or instruction giver based on their previous experiences. For instance, old people can easily highlight their mistakes and can provide useful tips to remove it. Moreover, older residents are perfect role models for society and also to work properly in office. Indeed, old people are not perfect for consulting youngsters. Firstly, older individuals cannot provide latest information to them. Besides, young residents can suggest an updated guidance that goes with the latest trend. Such as, dress code, attire and style. In that case youth residents can be highly motivated, and can be happy to obtain an advice for young people. Therefore, young people can provide professional and legal consulting. To epitomize, to be a skilled, educated person. Furthermore, youngsters can train children to behave professionally. To sum up, it can be said that, old people are better advice giver in all aspects of life. However, I think consulting with young residents will be more efficient.
It is
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often
said that nowadays taking advice from older
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individuals
as opposed to youngsters are becoming a common phenomenon in
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some
countries.
However
, I reckon to consult with younger
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individuals
rather
than
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old
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people
. Here, I will bring both sides of the statements.

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many
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positive
side to go for counselling with
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old
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people
. To
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begin
,
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old
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individuals
are
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very
experienced with everything, they can
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provide
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good
guidance to everyone.
Hence
,
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young
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residents
could shape their knowledge levels and
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skills
,
as well
as they are an ideal person to educate about ethics. According to psychology, it is obvious that
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old
citizens are ideal mentor or instruction giver based on their previous experiences.
For instance
,
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old
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people
can
easily
highlight their mistakes and can
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provide
useful tips to remove it.
Moreover
, older
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residents
are perfect role models for society and
also
to work
properly
in office.

Indeed
,
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old
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people
are not perfect for consulting youngsters.
Firstly
, older
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individuals
cannot
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provide
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latest
information to them.
Besides
,
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young
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residents
can suggest an updated guidance that goes with the latest trend. Such as, dress code, attire and style.
In that case
youth
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residents
can be
highly
motivated, and can be happy to obtain
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an advice
for
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young
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people
.
Therefore
,
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young
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people
can
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provide
professional and legal consulting. To epitomize, to be a skilled, educated person.
Furthermore
, youngsters can train children to behave
professionally
.

To sum up, it can
be said
that,
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old
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people
are better advice giver in all aspects of life.
However
, I
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think
consulting with
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young
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residents
will be more efficient.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to young people. Give your opinion and include relevant examples. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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