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Should the government or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools? Give a reason for your answer from your knowledge or experience. v.1

Should the government or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools? Give a reason for your answer from your knowledge or experience. v. 1
Education is in the hands of teachers and also on the ruling authority of a nation. I agree that up to certain extent government has a significant role in the content of schooling, but it makes the teachers outshine when it comes to what should be taught in the academics. Here we will have a glance at content of teaching, role of tutors and government in the education system. Teachers have a vital role in educating students, they follow a structure designed by education authority and have curriculums to follow, within an allotted time limit they have to deliver sufficient knowledge on a general basis, but but a child with a liking towards swimming if nurtured with a result oriented techniques, enhances his skills and gives the opportunity to take swimming as a mainstream career and fetch him an outstanding result, likewise an individual with good communication skills can make his career as a news reader or a radio jockey. Furthermore respective subject tutors ought to develop students with appropriate information in order to get favourable results. . The government on the other hand has devised a structure on the basis of mass production and not on individual talent, as it is not possible for them to hunt a specific talent. It has to regulate the vast number of schools of the nation nevertheless can provide with special facilities for teachers to cope with emerging talents, But ultimately it's the teachers who have to carry out the remaining task of imparting desired subject. So I reckon that, teachers with a benefit of direct access to the students’ development have certain merits in bringing out the hidden ability of a candidate and developing them. Thus making them accountable for what is supposed to be conveyed in schools.
Education is in the hands of
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on the ruling authority of a nation. I
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agree
that up to certain extent
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government
has a significant role in the content of schooling,
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but
it
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makes
the
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teachers
outshine when it
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comes
to what should
be taught
in the academics. Here we will have a glance at content of teaching, role of tutors and
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government
in the education system.

Teachers have a vital role in educating students, they follow a structure designed by education authority and have curriculums to follow, within an allotted time limit they
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have to
deliver sufficient knowledge on a general basis,
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but
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but
a child with a liking towards swimming if nurtured with a result oriented techniques, enhances his
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skills
and gives the opportunity to take swimming as a mainstream career and fetch him an outstanding result,
likewise
an individual with
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good
communication
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skills
can
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make
his career as a news reader or a radio jockey.
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Furthermore
respective subject tutors ought to develop students with appropriate information in order to
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get
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favourable
results.
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The
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government
on the other hand
has devised a structure on the basis of mass production and not on individual talent, as it is not possible for them to hunt a specific talent. It
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has to
regulate the vast number of schools of the nation
nevertheless
can provide with special facilities for
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teachers
to cope with emerging talents,
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But
ultimately
it's the
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teachers
who
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have to
carry out the remaining task of imparting desired subject.

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So
I reckon that,
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teachers
with a benefit of direct access to the students’ development have certain merits in bringing out the hidden ability of a candidate and developing them.
Thus
making them accountable for what
is supposed
to
be conveyed
in schools.
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IELTS essay Should the government or teachers be responsible for what is to be taught in schools? Give a reason for your answer from your knowledge or experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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