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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Nowadays, many students pursue their higher studies in foreign countries. The main advantage for students studying abroad is the access to better quality education and improved job prospects. Although these can be beneficial, but there are some disadvantages like difficulty to adapt to the local culture and linguistic challenges. In my opinion, moreover, despite these downsides, students studying abroad enjoy better career prospects and exposure to diverse cultures. The main advantage is that the students will get global exposure and quality of education will be high and so will be the career growth and wages. Firstly, Whenever students visit foreign countries they will experience a different set of new things like culture, language, and climate etc. For example, Sundar Pichai CEO of Google comes from India and he did his higher studies in USA and got himself into a position that fulfilled his career ambition. I strongly support that there are lots of advantages to pursuing studies abroad. On the down side, studying abroad poses many challenges. An international student may have to deal with racism. They may also find it difficult to adapt to the alien culture and climate. For example, Indian students studying in cold countries like Canada and the UK often complain about the harsh winters they have to cope with. For example, one of my friends applied for his post-graduation degree abroad and he spent lots of money to get into that university, but unfortunately he was not able to adapt to their syllabus and climate so returned to his home country midway through the first semester. Such incidents are not rare. In conclusion, the fact that more and more students opt to study abroad is a clear indication that the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. Moreover, there are some minor drawbacks in pursuing higher education abroad, but a student who is willing to adapt to the cultural and climatic change can reap rich benefits from studying overseas.
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disadvantages like difficulty to
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moreover
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enjoy better career prospects and exposure to diverse cultures.

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global exposure and quality of education will be high and
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will be the career growth and wages.
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visit foreign
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they will experience a
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abroad and
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unfortunately he was not able to
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midway through the
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minor drawbacks in pursuing higher education
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who is willing to
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can reap rich benefits from
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overseas.
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IELTS essay University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
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