The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.10
The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement? v. 10
Over the past 20 years, the people's health condition keeps decreasing continuously. I tend to agree with this statement, because of people in nowadays is likely eating unhealthy food and the polluted environment issue which is increasing every year after year.
According to people's lifestyle in the present day, which is working hard and have no time to cook food at home, junk food is the trail for them. Junk food companies have expanded wildly in several countries, and more popular than the traditional food in each country. For instance, Macdonal is open 24 hours and it also extend in various countries, they cook a simple feed and easy to order and consume. This can cause the healthy problem in every age, especially in working age.
Moreover, the polluted environment is another factor that affects people's health. For example, air pollution, which is in nowadays the air has more carbon dioxide than in the past, it causes of deforestation. Getting excess air pollution can cause several diseases, according to scientist's experiment, respiratory disease is caused by breathing excess carbon dioxide, and also can several diseases which come after.
To sum up, it is obvious that standard of people's health getting decreases if we compare with the past. It is because of mainly two factors which are food consuming and air pollution during the current day.
Over the past 20 years, the
people's
health condition
keeps
decreasing
continuously
. I tend to
agree
with this statement,
because
of
people
in nowadays
is likely eating unhealthy
food
and the polluted environment issue which is increasing every year after year.
According to
people's
lifestyle in the present day, which is working
hard
and have no time to cook
food
at home, junk
food
is the trail for them. Junk
food
companies
have expanded
wildly
in several countries, and more popular than the traditional
food
in each country.
For instance
,
Macdonal
is open 24 hours and it
also
extend
in various countries, they cook a simple feed and easy to order and consume. This can cause the healthy problem in every age,
especially
in working age.
Moreover
, the polluted environment is another factor that affects
people's
health.
For example
,
air
pollution, which is
in nowadays
the
air
has more carbon dioxide than in the past, it causes of deforestation. Getting excess
air
pollution can cause several diseases, according to scientist's experiment, respiratory disease
is caused
by breathing excess carbon dioxide, and
also
can several diseases which
come
after.
To sum up, it is obvious that standard of
people's
health getting decreases if we compare with the past. It is
because
of
mainly
two factors which are
food
consuming and
air
pollution during the
current
day.
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