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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
Nowadays, a trend is set that University students have been often preferred to study abroad comparatively. Although studying in abroad exposes yourself to pool of opportunities, but, simultaneously discloses one of several challenges such as culture and linguistics. Though there are challenges, but those can never outweigh the chances that studying overseas will provide. Most of the institutions in abroad have teachers across the world which will reveal one of the various ideas and learning. Renowned universities will possess newly advanced technologies and learning methodologies which help students to accustom with the modern trends. Being an Indian, I have observed many average students performing great and exceptionally well in abroad where the infrastructures and education is far better and matured than ours. Therefore, as per my experience, I believe that education from abroad not only enrich one self by teachers across the globe, but also help to intimate with the advanced trends of education. The main disadvantage of studying abroad is the linguistic and cultural differences between the two regions. It will always be difficult to adjust and mould one self to the languages and their nuances. Forming a social group of friends will be hard as one need to learn the common language else resulting in loneliness and boredom. For example, few people get depressed in such occasions and decides to return their hometown being unable to cope with such hard circumstances. At last, I want to state that though there are many positive possibilities, but the issues with communication still exist for students studying in abroad. To conclude receiving education from abroad universities has shown a sharp rise among students. Studying in abroad puts themselves to enormous amount of technological opportunities which one is not aware, but it comes with challenges in terms of communication and adjustment with the culture. However, the plethora of opportunities and benefits of studying in abroad will never be dominated by the disadvantages which can be managed with time.
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is set
that University
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students
have been
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often
preferred to study
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abroad
comparatively
.

Although
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studying
in
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abroad
exposes yourself to pool of opportunities,
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but
,
simultaneously
discloses one of several challenges such as culture and linguistics. Though there are challenges,
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but
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those can
never outweigh the chances that
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studying
overseas will provide.

Most of the institutions in
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abroad
have teachers across the world which will reveal one of the various
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ideas
and learning. Renowned universities will possess
newly
advanced technologies and learning methodologies which
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help
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students
to
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accustom with
the modern trends. Being an Indian, I have observed
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many
average
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students
performing great and
exceptionally
well in
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abroad
where the infrastructures and education is far better and matured than ours.
Therefore
, as per my experience, I believe that education from
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abroad
not
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only
enrich one self by teachers across the globe,
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but
also
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help
to intimate with the advanced trends of education.

The main disadvantage of
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studying
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abroad
is the linguistic and cultural differences between the two regions. It will always be difficult to adjust and
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mould
one self to the languages and their nuances. Forming a social group of friends will be
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hard
as one need to learn the common language else resulting in loneliness and boredom.
For example
, few
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people
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get
depressed in such occasions and decides to return their hometown being unable to cope with such
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hard
circumstances. At last, I want to state that though there are
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many
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positive
possibilities,
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but
the issues with communication
still
exist for
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students
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studying
in abroad.

To conclude
receiving education from
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abroad
universities has shown a sharp rise among
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students
.
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Studying
in
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abroad
puts themselves to enormous amount of technological opportunities which one is not aware,
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but
it
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comes
with challenges in terms of communication and adjustment with the culture.

However
, the plethora of opportunities and benefits of
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studying
in
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abroad
will never
be dominated
by the disadvantages which can
be managed
with time.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
He who knows no foreign languages knows nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
326 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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