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Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v.2

Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v. 2
Transportation is the necessity of modern day life. People use cars, motorcycles and other vehicles to fulfill their daily transport needs. These days, whether to use private cars or not, is being question of debate. In this essay, I will provide my point of view by analyzing both sides of the arguments. People having their personal cars find an ease to move anywhere when needed. Private cars are being used for transportation as it is the easiest possible way. For example, according to a survey done in the early 20th century in the USA revealed that more than 70% of people secure their time by traveling in their own vehicles. Hence, having one' s own car available at home can provide an effective way to save time in today' s busy and hectic life. On the other hand, pollution caused by a numerous number of cars is becoming the major reason for global warming. The discharge of various harmful gases; such as carbon dioxide, from an increasing number of cars is polluting our environment badly. For instance, a study done by the University of Texas showed that the ozone layer is being damaged continuously due to the release of such harmful gases by increased road traffic. Therefore, making a trend of using other means of transport could be beneficial to save a natural healthy environment. In a nutshell, the essay discussed possible positive aspects of using personal vehicles as well as its deleterious effect on our society. Meanwhile, the benefits of using other means of transport are also being discussed.
Transportation is the necessity of modern day life.
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use
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cars
, motorcycles and
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other
vehicles to fulfill their daily transport needs. These days, whether to
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use
private
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cars
or not,
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is
being question of debate. In this essay, I will provide my point of view by analyzing both sides of the arguments.

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People
having their personal
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cars
find an
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ease
to
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move
anywhere when needed. Private
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cars
are being
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used
for transportation as it is the easiest possible way.
For example
, according to a survey done in the early 20th century in the USA revealed that more than 70% of
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people
secure their time by traveling in their
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own
vehicles.
Hence
, having
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own
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car
available at home can provide an effective way to save time in
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today&
#039; s busy and hectic life.

On the
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other
hand, pollution caused by a numerous number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
is becoming the major reason for global warming. The discharge of various harmful gases; such as carbon dioxide, from an increasing number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
is polluting our environment
badly
.
For instance
, a study done by the University of Texas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that the ozone layer is
being damaged
continuously
due to the release of such harmful gases by increased road traffic.
Therefore
, making a trend of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
means of transport could be beneficial to save a natural healthy environment.

In a nutshell, the essay discussed possible
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positive
aspects of using personal vehicles
as well
as its deleterious effect on our society. Meanwhile, the benefits of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
means of transport are
also
being discussed
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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