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The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in the quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. v.1

The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in the quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. v. 1
Anyone who lives in a city is aware of the increasing number of cars on the road and the kinds of problems this creates are traffic jams, air pollution and longer commuting periods. As economies grow and access to cars spreads to increasing numbers of people, this trend is likely to worsen. The solution, it would seem, is for the government to encourage the use of public transport in urban areas, thus decreasing dependence on the car. One way to stimulate public transport use is to make private car use more expensive and inconvenient. The introduction of tolls along urban motorways has been successfully employed in many cities. Other such measures are high-priced permits for parking in urban areas and the restriction of parking to a limited number of cars. Faced with high costs or no place to park, commuters would perhaps be more willing to abandon their cars in favour of buses or trains. There are also less punishing ways of spurring public transport use. The construction of free car-parks at suburban train stations has proven successful in quite a number of countries. This allows commuters to drive part of the way but then they ultimately use public transportation into the central, most congested, urban areas. Moreover, private cars can not carry many passengers at a time yet occupy spaces in the street. As the number of cars is increasing in the road so does the traffic jam. Perhaps the major disadvantage of cars, in general, is the huge damage they do to the human health and to the environment. More cars mean more pollution. The environment pollution is a serious issue today and at any cost, we must reduce the amount of pollution. Indeed, making public transport more comfortable and convenient should work to attract more commuters and decrease traffic congestion. Public transport that is convenient and comfortable retains its passengers, much like any business that satisfies its customers. The more commuters committed to taking public transport, the less congestion on city streets.
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number
of
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cars
on the road and the kinds of problems this creates are traffic jams, air pollution and longer commuting periods. As economies grow and access to
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cars
spreads to increasing
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numbers
of
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people
, this trend is likely to worsen. The solution, it would seem, is for the
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government
to encourage the
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use
of
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public
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transport
in
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urban
areas,
thus
decreasing dependence on the car.

One way to stimulate
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public
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transport
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use
is to
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make
private
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car
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use
more expensive and inconvenient. The introduction of tolls along
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urban
motorways has been
successfully
employed in
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many
cities. Other such measures are high-priced permits for parking in
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urban
areas and the restriction of parking to a limited
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number
of
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cars
. Faced with high costs or no place to park,
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commuters
would perhaps be more willing to abandon their
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cars
in
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favour
of buses or trains.

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also
less punishing ways of spurring
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public
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transport
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use
. The construction of free car-parks at suburban train stations has proven successful in quite a
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number
of countries. This
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allows
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commuters
to drive part of the way
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but
then they
ultimately
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use
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transportation into the central, most congested,
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urban
areas.

Moreover
, private
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cars
can not carry
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many
passengers at a time
yet
occupy spaces in the street. As the
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number
of
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cars
is increasing in the road
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so
does the traffic jam. Perhaps the major disadvantage of
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cars
,
in general
, is the huge damage they do to the human health and to the environment. More
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cars
mean more pollution. The environment pollution is a serious issue
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today
and at any cost, we
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must
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reduce
the amount of pollution.

Indeed
, making
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public
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transport
more comfortable and convenient should work to attract more
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commuters
and decrease traffic congestion.
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Public
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transport
that is
convenient and comfortable retains its passengers, much like any business that satisfies its customers. The more
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commuters
committed to taking
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public
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transport
, the less congestion on city streets.
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IELTS essay The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in the quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
335 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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