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Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v.1

Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v. 1
Now a day, television programs are mostly based on reports of crime and criminal activities, which are gaining enormous popularity. These reports have spices of thrill, fear and excitement, which are more appealing to masses than other programs. However, it has numerous adverse effects on the audience by creating panic, depression and urges to perform similar activities as they are getting the details of a particular criminal activity. It is the human psychology that the human mind intrigues more towards elements of thrill, excitement and passion instead of others emotions, so television houses are playing with the minds of masses by showing programs based on criminals and crimes. As a matter of fact, Media houses are concerned more about their channel ratings and TRPs ignoring the fact that they are creating hysteria and frenzy among people. For instance, a report has been published in 'The Dawn' that leading media houses are deliberating aired reports based on criminal activities to get more viewers. Although these shows are gaining much popularity, they are causing insurmountable negative effects on the public because the media has a huge influence on the minds of people and it has an ability to make or mar one society. Firstly, constant exposure to such negative activities has a tendency to create a certain mental ailments such as depression, anxiety and panic attacks. Secondly, by watching a large number of such reports, people who have some criminal tendency learn the new ways of committing crimes. Finally, it gives an overall impression of a pessimistic and unsafe world, for instance, a research is conducted at Cambridge University, which revealed that people now a day’s consider this world less safe place to live, owing to the large number of media reports on crime. In conclusion, television programs related to crimes and criminal activities are immensely popular among masses due to their elements of thrill and excitement. Although it gives some awareness to people, it has uncountable adverse effects on viewers by disturbing their mental health as well as perception of a whole world in which they are residing
Now
a day, television
programs
are
mostly
based on
reports
of
crime
and
criminal
activities
, which are gaining enormous popularity. These
reports
have spices of thrill, fear and excitement, which are more appealing to masses than other
programs
.
However
, it has numerous adverse effects on the audience by creating panic, depression and urges
to perform
similar
activities
as they are getting the
details
of a particular
criminal
activity.

It is the human psychology that the human mind intrigues more towards elements of thrill, excitement and passion
instead
of others emotions,
so
television
houses
are playing with the minds of masses by showing
programs
based on
criminals
and
crimes
. As a matter of fact,
Media
houses
are concerned
more about their channel ratings and
TRPs
ignoring the fact that they are creating hysteria and frenzy among
people
.
For instance
, a
report
has
been published
in 'The Dawn' that leading
media
houses
are deliberating aired
reports
based on
criminal
activities
to
get
more viewers.

Although these
shows
are gaining much popularity, they are causing insurmountable
negative
effects on the public
because
the
media
has a huge influence on the minds of
people
and it has an ability to
make
or mar one society.
Firstly
, constant exposure to such
negative
activities
has a tendency to create a certain mental
ailments
such as depression, anxiety and panic attacks.
Secondly
, by watching
a large number of
such
reports
,
people
who have
some
criminal
tendency learn the new ways of committing
crimes
.
Finally
, it gives an
overall
impression of a pessimistic and unsafe world,
for instance
,
a research
is conducted
at Cambridge University, which revealed that
people
now
a day’s consider this world less safe place to
live
, owing to the large number of
media
reports
on crime.

In conclusion
, television
programs
related to
crimes
and
criminal
activities
are
immensely
popular among masses due to their elements of thrill and excitement. Although it gives
some
awareness to
people
, it has uncountable adverse effects on viewers by disturbing their mental health
as well
as perception of a whole world in which they are
residing
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Should the authorities from big cities around the world discourage citizens from using private cars and rather encourage them to use other means of transport such as bicycles, skates, the subway, etc. ? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
7.5
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