Some people think that advertising on TV is useless and others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1
Some people think that advertising on TV is useless and others disagree. v. 1
Currently, the proportion between male and female students in university has become one of the most controversial and recurrent topics in our society. Whilst some people affirm that it should not be a metric to evaluate how fairness the system is, other people are strongly convinced that it is one of the main problems that causes differences between both genres. Is it a real problem that must be solved as soon as possible, or it is just a new topic that has been invented to criticize the current methodology?
On the one hand, several studies have demonstrated that the proportion between both genres is considerably unbalanced in some university degrees. For instance, in computer science, the amount of male students is notably higher while in education degrees occurs exactly the opposite. Over the years, our society has developed some stereotypes that have to be changed, in order to break some frontiers that are hindering the introduction of some students independent of their genre. For this reason, I agree that some changes must be done in order to change that situation.
On the other hand, forcing the proportion of male and female students is quite straightforward and it lacks of sense because the evaluation method should be based on a numeric value, like an average mark, not in the student genre. Making those differences, students will not be evaluated fairly, hence, we would be replacing an unfair method by a worse one.
In conclusion, I agree that male and female students should be equally accepted by university subject. However, the way to achieve that goal is not replacing the current methodology, but breaking some traditional and archaic ideas that usually classify our society into layers, that sometimes are directly related to the genres.
Currently
, the proportion between male and female
students
in university has become one of the most controversial and recurrent topics in our society. Whilst
some
people
affirm that it should not be a metric to evaluate how fairness the system is, other
people
are
strongly
convinced that it is one of the main problems that causes differences between both genres. Is it a real problem that
must
be solved
as
soon
as possible, or it is
just
a new topic that has
been invented
to criticize the
current
methodology?
On the one hand, several studies have demonstrated that the proportion between both genres is
considerably
unbalanced in
some
university degrees.
For instance
, in computer science, the amount of male
students
is
notably
higher while in education degrees occurs exactly the opposite. Over the years, our society has developed
some
stereotypes that
have to
be
changed
, in order to break
some
frontiers that are hindering the introduction of
some
students
independent of their
genre
.
For this reason
, I
agree
that
some
changes
must
be done
in order to
change
that situation.
On the other hand
, forcing the proportion of male and female
students
is quite straightforward and it lacks of sense
because
the evaluation method should
be based
on a numeric value, like an average mark, not in the
student
genre
. Making those differences,
students
will not
be evaluated
fairly
,
hence
, we would be replacing an unfair method by a worse one.
In conclusion
, I
agree
that male and female
students
should be
equally
accepted
by university subject.
However
, the way to achieve that goal is not replacing the
current
methodology,
but
breaking
some
traditional and archaic
ideas
that
usually
classify our society into layers, that
sometimes
are
directly
related to the genres.
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