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More and more businesses, as well as individuals, are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v.4

More and more businesses, as well as individuals, are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 4
Music is not just some melodious sound being played in a movie or a theatre. People often tend to have their own definition of this word. Do we understand the concept of why do we need it? What are its types? Or why traditional is more important than the International ones that we hear globally nowadays? This essay will focus on the notion of music and discuss the crucial role of regional and international music as well. For some people, it is considered to be a sound of Love. Although, this is a language that one doesn’t simply speak, instead, it is needed to be felt. For example, two lovers share their feelings for each other through dancing to the tunes of their song. Another example would be, if a girl has recently moved to a hostel away from her home. However, to be independent, she needs to be strong enough. By the time, she makes new friends, she will have her rhythm to hold on to. There are various types and forms of Music which exists around us, some of it may be traditional or global. If I talk specifically about India, there are around 29 states and almost each of them have their regional tunes, which displays the heritage of a region or a culture. This is why traditional ones possesses more value because it shows the richness of a culture, it enriches the history of that place. In the inference of my above points, I would like to conclude that the people are easily able to connect with their regional rhythms than to any foreign ones as the emotions are very well connected with the land they belong to as it gives them a feeling of home and comfort.
Music
is not
just
some
melodious sound
being played
in a movie or a
theatre
.
People
often
tend to have their
own
definition of this word. Do we understand the concept of why do we need it? What are its types? Or why traditional is more
important
than the International
ones
that we hear globally nowadays? This essay will focus on the notion of
music
and discuss the crucial role of regional and international
music
as well
.

For
some
people
, it
is considered
to be a sound of
Love
. Although, this is a language that one doesn’t
simply
speak,
instead
, it
is needed
to
be felt
.
For example
, two lovers share their feelings for each other through dancing to the tunes of their song. Another example would be, if a girl has recently
moved
to a hostel away from her home.
However
, to be independent, she needs to be strong
enough
. By the time, she
makes
new friends, she will have her rhythm to hold on to.

There are various types and forms of
Music
which exists around us,
some
of it may be traditional or global. If I talk
specifically
about India, there are around 29 states and almost each of them have their regional tunes, which displays the heritage of a region or a culture. This is why traditional
ones
possesses more value
because
it
shows
the richness of a culture, it enriches the history of that place.

In the inference of my above points, I would like
to conclude
that the
people
are
easily
able to connect with their regional rhythms than to any foreign
ones
as the emotions are
very
well connected
with the land they belong to as it gives them a feeling of home and comfort.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more businesses, as well as individuals, are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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