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Should private schools receive government funding: Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.1

Should private schools receive government funding: 1
With the increasing number of private institutions, it becomes pertinent to determine whether government ought to extend finances to privately owned educational institutions. I am of the opinion that public funds should not be made available to private institutions, but rather, be best put to use in developing other sectors of the country. To start with, financing private schools with public funds means additional funds must be provided by the government, consequently, leading to more financial burden and poor standard of living of the masses. To illustrate further, a developing country like Nigeria, with low revenue, would have to cut short on its budget to other sectors of the economy. Sectors such as Healthcare and Security may be subjected to poor management and inefficiency as a result low funding. The overall effect is therefore, a low living standard of the populace. In addition, the current dilapidated state of many public institutions coupled with poor learning environment is bound to be on the increase if government deem it fit to make funds available to private schools. In the past, public schools pride themselves in breeding elites in the society by giving world-class tutoring. For example, Queen's college and Mayflower school in Nigeria, to mention a few, were known to dominate and lead other schools in competitions and conversely, produce world leaders. These high standards have long deteriorated as a result of low funding and will furthermore, suffer greater damage if public funds are channeled towards privately owned schools. In conclusion, government should be concerned with improving the living standard of the people by making funds available to develop public sectors and institutions rather than financing private schools.
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institutions, it becomes pertinent to determine whether
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ought to extend finances to
privately
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owned
educational institutions. I am of the opinion that
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public
funds should not
be made
available to
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private
institutions,
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rather
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use
in developing other
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sectors
of the country.

To
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start
with, financing
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private
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schools
with
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public
funds means additional funds
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must
be provided
by the
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government
,
consequently
, leading to more financial burden and poor
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standard
of living of the masses. To illustrate
further
, a
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developing country
like Nigeria, with
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low
revenue, would
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have to
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cut
short on its budget to other
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sectors
of the economy.
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Sectors
such as Healthcare and Security may
be subjected
to poor management and inefficiency
as a result
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low
funding. The
overall
effect is
therefore
, a
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low
living
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standard
of the populace.

In addition
, the
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current
dilapidated state of
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many
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public
institutions coupled with poor learning environment
is bound
to be on the increase if
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government
deem it fit to
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make
funds available to
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private
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schools
. In the past,
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public
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schools
pride themselves in breeding elites in the society by giving world-
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class
tutoring.
For example
, Queen's college and Mayflower
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school
in Nigeria, to mention a few,
were known
to dominate and lead other
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schools
in competitions and
conversely
, produce world leaders. These high
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standards
have long deteriorated
as a result
of
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low
funding and will
furthermore
, suffer greater damage if
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public
funds
are channeled
towards
privately
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owned
schools.

In conclusion
,
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government
should
be concerned
with improving the living
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standard
of the
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people
by making funds available to develop
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public
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sectors
and institutions
rather
than financing
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private
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schools
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Should private schools receive government funding: 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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