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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. v.7

Should private schools receive government funding? v. 7
Although there are public schools which are completely funded by the government, private schools are not supported by the government and have a hefty fee structure. In my opinion, private schools ought to be funded by the government too. This will be highly beneficial for those children who are not able to afford to study in private schools. Firstly, by providing financial aid to the private schools, the government can make sure that there are some seats available for those students who have a weak financial background. This will bring equality within the society and poor families who are not able to afford will not be left behind. This will be a positive step for developing society and nation. Secondly, it is seen that in many countries such as India public schools have poor infrastructure, while private schools have far better facilities. Hence, if the government provides financial support to such privately owned schools, poor families too will be able to send their offspring to private schools and they will also be able to use the same infrastructure. A better infrastructure is indispensable for a better future and growth. Moreover, it can be seen that children from privileged backgrounds know better about the technologies and study options, and hence through regular interaction with such students, poor students can also learn a lot more. To conclude, if the government funds private schools poor students will be able to enroll in them and that will be hugely beneficial for the society.
Although there are public
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schools
which are completely funded by the
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government
,
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private
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schools
are not supported by the
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government
and have a hefty fee structure. In my opinion,
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private
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schools
ought to
be funded
by the
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government
too. This will be
highly
beneficial for those children who are not
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able
to afford to study in
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private
schools.

Firstly
, by providing financial aid to the
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private
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schools
, the
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government
can
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make
sure that there are
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some
seats available for those
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students
who have a weak financial background. This will bring equality within the society and
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poor
families who are not
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able
to afford will not be
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left
behind. This will be a
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positive
step for developing society and nation.

Secondly
, it is
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seen
that in
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many
countries such as India public
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schools
have
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poor
infrastructure, while
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private
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schools
have far
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better
facilities.
Hence
, if the
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government
provides financial support to such
privately
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owned
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schools
,
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poor
families too will be
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able
to
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send
their offspring to
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private
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schools and
they will
also
be
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able
to
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use
the same infrastructure. A
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better
infrastructure is indispensable for a
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better
future and growth.
Moreover
, it can be
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seen
that children from privileged backgrounds know
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better
about the technologies and study options, and
hence
through regular interaction with such
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students
,
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poor
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students
can
also
learn a lot more.

To conclude
, if the
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government
funds
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private
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schools
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poor
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students
will be
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able
to enroll in them and that will be
hugely
beneficial for the society.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Should private schools receive government funding? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
249 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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