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Should parents punish their children and to what extent is punishment important in a child’s life? Give your opinion. v.2

Should parents punish their children and Give your opinion. v. 2
Is it prudent to say that parents shouldn' t punish their kids. . . ? Two diverse perspectives surface while meticulously evaluating this issue. One perspective answers the aforementioned question in the affirmative with utmost conviction whereas the other perspective makes its disapproval evident by denying its acquiescence. Personally, I have a proclivity towards the other perspective that children shouldn' t be punished. Every child is different and not every child understands everything after convincing to do right things after mistakes. Some might remain as stubborn as rock and while some might understand as early as possible. In case of stubborn child, mild punishment will create psychology of not making more mistakes. This might help teenagers to keep them on track. But parents should punish their children when they have gown up. For example by considering age factor above 18 age children are capable of taking their own decisions and they can think about right and wrong side of coins. One research shows hat parents who punishes their kids of legal age, there are more chances that children choose wrong side and leave their parents. Whereas when parents punishes their kids by not using mental and physical harassment, there are more chances of being successful in future. Some parents hit their kids by stick or any similar things this might leave scar on innocent minds for their whole life. Punishments like social service, cleaning their own room or garden or doing their laundry on their own, will generate feeling of guilt and this feeling in enough for behaving as well as doing right in the future. Every parents should build a healthy relation with their kids then by parents words only the kid will understand about his mistakes. This will not bring distance in relations. Hence after a holistic analysis, it is evident that the points in favor of the thought that children should not be punished overpower the points in favor of children should be punished with its logic, cogency and rationale
Is it prudent to say that
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their
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? Two diverse
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perspectives
surface while
meticulously
evaluating this issue. One
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perspective
answers the aforementioned question in the affirmative with utmost conviction whereas the other
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perspective
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makes
its disapproval evident by denying its acquiescence.
Personally
, I have a proclivity towards the other
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perspective
that
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children
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shouldn&
#039; t
be punished
.

Every child is
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different
and not every child understands everything after convincing
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to do
right things after mistakes.
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Some
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might
remain as stubborn as rock and while
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some
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might
understand as early as possible. In case of stubborn child, mild punishment will create psychology of not making more mistakes. This
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might
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help
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teenagers
to
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keep
them on
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track
.
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But
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parents
should
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punish
their
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children
when they have gown up.
For example
by considering age factor above 18 age
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children
are capable of taking their
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own
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decisions and
they can
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think
about right and
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wrong
side of coins. One research
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shows
hat
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parents
who
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punishes
their
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kids
of legal age, there are more chances that
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children
choose
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wrong
side and
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leave
their
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parents
. Whereas when
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parents
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punishes
their
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kids
by not using mental and physical harassment, there are more chances of being successful
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in future
.

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Some
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parents
hit their
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kids
by stick or any similar things this
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might
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leave
scar on innocent minds for their whole life. Punishments like social service, cleaning their
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own
room or garden or doing their laundry on their
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own
, will generate feeling of guilt and this feeling in
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enough
for behaving
as well
as doing right in the future. Every
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parents
should build a healthy relation with their
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kids
then by
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parents
words
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only
the
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kid
will understand about his mistakes. This will not bring distance in relations.

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Hence
after a holistic analysis, it is evident that the points in favor of the
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thought
that
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children
should not
be punished
overpower the points in favor of
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children
should
be punished
with its logic, cogency and rationale
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Should parents punish their children and Give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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