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Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? v.3

Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished. v. 3
The 20th and 21st centuries are characterized by all the momentous changes which have been made in humans' lives. Perhaps the most important milestone of these two centuries is the advent of sophisticated technologies, which influence people' s lives enormously. Various points of view which are germane to the matter being discussed brings us to the moot question as to whether movies and television programs should rely on positive and negative aspects of people hallmarks. However, the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that although positive and negative behaviors of people play a significant role, movies and TV should cover informative and helpful program regarding humans' lives. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issue in this framework. To commence with, in today' s hectic city of life, technologies have penetrated every single facet of our lives, in which TV is one of the manifestations of the technological advancement. Generally phrased, TV nowadays provides a wide range of programs about different subjects. But these programs should be helpful and informative for human beings. As a palpable example, knowing which people should be rewarded or punished might not be effective in human lives owing to the fact that there are several tasks human beings need to learn. In fact, TV could provide an opportunity for individuals and teach them through programs on how to take the responsibility for their behaviors and not to do something wrong. To elucidate more on this issue, TV and movies could play a consequential role in the treatment of people in any given society. So, not only can individuals learn how to behave but also can learn how to become a self-sufficient and successful person in the long run. Another equally salient point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that TV programs and movies can provide documentaries for people and help them enhance their knowledge. If we take a minute to ponder over it, vast majorities of people in the society suffer from the paucity of knowledge and information about various realms. For instance, a TV program or a movie can provide fertile ground for people to become familiar with the history of the nation where he/she lives. So, not only can history help people make a sound and a wise decision in their personal lives but also can support them not to do something wrong owing to the fact that our history is our teacher. It can be deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that there are majorities of programs that could be shown by TV, which are helpful and useful for the entire humanity. However, every coin has two sides. If TV programs or movies concentrate on people' s hallmarks and represent their positive and negative characters, it allows people to recognize and identify human beings as easy as possible. However, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective. In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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are characterized
by all the momentous
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changes
which have
been made
in
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humans&
#039;
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lives
. Perhaps the most
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important
milestone of these two centuries is the advent of sophisticated technologies, which influence
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people&
#039; s
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lives
enormously
. Various points of view which are germane to the matter
being discussed
brings us to the moot question
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as to whether
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movies
and television
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programs
should rely on
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of
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people
hallmarks.
However
, the popular sentiment to which I
vehemently
cling is that although
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positive
and
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negative
behaviors of
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people
play a significant role,
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movies
and TV should cover informative and helpful
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program
regarding
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humans&
#039;
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lives
. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward
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some
cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issue in this framework.

To commence with, in
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today&
#039; s hectic city of life, technologies have penetrated every single facet of our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lives
, in which TV is one of the manifestations of the technological advancement.
Generally
phrased, TV nowadays
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provides
a wide range of
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programs
about
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different
subjects.
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But
these
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programs
should be helpful and informative for
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human
beings. As a palpable example, knowing which
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people
should
be rewarded
or punished might not be effective in
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human
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lives
owing to the fact that there are several tasks
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human
beings need to learn. In fact, TV could
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provide
an opportunity for individuals and teach them through
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
on how to take the responsibility for their behaviors and not to do something
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wrong
. To elucidate more on this issue, TV and
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movies
could play a consequential role in the treatment of
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people
in any
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given
society.
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So
, not
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only
can individuals learn how to behave
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but
also
can learn how to become a self-sufficient and successful person in the long run.

Another
equally
salient point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that TV
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programs
and
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movies
can
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provide
documentaries for
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people
and
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help
them enhance their knowledge. If we take a minute to ponder over it, vast majorities of
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people
in the society suffer from the paucity of knowledge and information about various realms.
For instance
, a TV
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program
or a
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movie
can
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provide
fertile ground for
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people
to become familiar with the history of the nation where he/she
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lives
.
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So
, not
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only
can history
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help
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people
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make
a sound and a wise decision in their personal
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lives
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but
also
can support them not to do something
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wrong
owing to the fact that our history is our teacher. It can
be deduced
from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that there are majorities of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
programs
that could
be shown
by TV, which are helpful and useful for the entire humanity.
However
, every coin has two sides. If TV
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programs
or
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movies
concentrate on
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people&
#039; s hallmarks and represent their
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positive
and
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negative
characters, it
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allows
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people
to recognize and identify
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human
beings as easy as possible.
However
, it was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are more reasonable grounds that can lend weight to my personal perspective.

In light of reasons elaborated, I reiterate that
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IELTS essay Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
518 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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