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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? v.5

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? v. 5
Many people believe that governments should spend more money on improving roads and highways. However, other people think that more money should be spent on improving public transportation. Personally, I think that both of these opinions have their advantages and disadvantages. The first reason for improving public transportation is overpopulation. The number of cars is rising dramatically. As a result of this fact, the contemplation of air is increasing that leads to irreversible aftereffects such as the presence of acid rains and different kinds of human diseases. So, the improving of public transportation will reduce pollution. The second reason for this is the possibility to decrease the amount of traffic jam that also has a huge influence on air pollution. Moreover, it will save time and people's money. One does not have to pay for gas for his car, car insurance, repair, oil change and etc. The third reason for this is a sharp decrease in the level of car accidents. People will feel more secure in this case. Road accidents have become a violent issue and people feel that the Government should do something to reduce the accidents happening on the roads daily. However, despite all these advantages, this decision has a few disadvantages. First of all, public transportation means the presence of schedule and working hours. So, one has to wait for a bus or for a train in a subway or call for a taxi in order to get somewhere. Second of all, it is a big chance that one has to spend some time getting to the nearest bus stop or subway entrance. As for roads and highways, I think it is a very important and topical issue. A personal car in this modern world is an essential vehicle. It gives one freedom and independence. Improving roads and highways governments will decrease the number of car accidents and traffic jams. I believe that in several years air pollution can be dramatically reduced by using solar energy to refuel our cars. Finally, I think that governments should spend money on improving public transportation as well as on roads and highways because it will benefit all people.
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public
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that both of these opinions have their advantages and disadvantages.

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first
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improving
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public
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transportation
is overpopulation. The number of
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cars
is rising
dramatically
.
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of this fact, the contemplation of air is increasing that leads to irreversible aftereffects such as the presence of acid rains and
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different
kinds of human diseases.
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improving
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public
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transportation
will
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pollution. The second reason for this is the possibility to decrease the amount of traffic jam that
also
has a huge influence on air pollution.
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, it will save time and
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. The third reason for this is a sharp decrease in the level of
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.
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people
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should do something to
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the
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happening on the
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roads
daily.

However
, despite all these advantages, this decision has a few disadvantages.
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First of all
,
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public
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transportation
means the presence of schedule and working hours.
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So
, one
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has to
wait for a bus or for a train in a subway or call for a taxi in order to
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time getting to the nearest bus
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stop
or subway entrance.

As for
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, I
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important
and topical issue. A personal
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in this modern world is an essential vehicle. It gives one freedom and independence.
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roads
and
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highways
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governments
will decrease the number of
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car
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accidents
and traffic jams. I believe that in several years air pollution can be
dramatically
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reduced
by using solar energy to refuel our cars.

Finally
, I
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that
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governments
should spend
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money
on
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improving
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public
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transportation
as well
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roads
and
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it will benefit all
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people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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