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Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? v.4

Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? v. 4
Nowadays, it can be observed that a number groups or organisations are proliferating in society. These are mainly classified into public and private groups. I will through light on the importance of these groups in the following paragraphs. Public groups or associations engage in solving problems in society or in a community. Let us take the case of Lions club of our community, it is a public group which takes care of about general issues related to water supply, roads and security of our locality. The members of this group are senior citizens, retired people from work and they are volunteers. Last year this club had done an excellent job in protecting our locality from chemical pollution by blocking the establishment of chemical industry near to our residential area. This club collected votes from the people against the company establishment and addressed the government to abolish the permission. Such groups are important for society improvement. Next, there are private groups which are formed only for member's benefits. Private groups belong to a sector or domain. To illustrate such as, I am a member of TIBCO technology group, this is formed by people who work on TIBCO software. There 400 members in this group from various organisations, we share knowledge related to our technology, job openings in our technology and we provide job reference to group members. This kind of private clubs helps the members to grow officially. In summary, people are realising the importance of associations and we can expect a myriad of them in future.
Nowadays, it can
be observed
that a number
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groups
or
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organisations
are proliferating in society. These are
mainly
classified into public and private
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groups
. I will through light on the importance of these
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groups
in the following paragraphs.

Public
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groups
or associations engage in solving problems in society or in a community.
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Let
us take the case of Lions
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club
of our community, it is a public
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group
which takes care of about general issues related to water supply, roads and security of our locality. The
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members
of this
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group
are senior citizens, retired
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people
from
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work and
they are volunteers. Last year this
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club
had done an excellent job in protecting our locality from chemical pollution by blocking the establishment of chemical industry near to our residential area. This
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club
collected votes from the
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people
against the
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company
establishment and addressed the
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government
to abolish the permission. Such
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groups
are
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important
for society improvement.
Next
, there are private
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groups
which
are formed
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only
for member's benefits.

Private
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groups
belong to a sector or domain. To illustrate such as, I am a
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member
of
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TIBCO
technology
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group
, this
is formed
by
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people
who work on
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TIBCO
software. There 400
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members
in this
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group
from various
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organisations
, we share knowledge related to our technology, job openings in our
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technology and
we provide job reference to
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group
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members
. This kind of private
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clubs
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helps
the
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members
to grow
officially
.

In summary,
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people
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are realising
the importance of
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associations and
we can
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expect
a myriad of them
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in future
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Groups or organizations are an important part of some people’s lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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