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Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v.1

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 1
In a modern educational system, mathematics becomes a basically subject at whichever the study level. It seems to be argued if all students should be taught to every student. I believe students could choose to learn enough extent. The essay here is aimed to discuss both sides of learning mathematics. To begin with, mathematics is an important and long-history subject. It takes a lot of advantages to human kinds. For example, our science system is based on the maths, and it has become the most useful tools in a hundred years ago. Although not everyone could become a mathematician, For a common person, maths are used everyday such as calculation. Thus, some basically math knowledge is necessary. Furthermore, learn maths is a good method to practise logic thinking which could be used in other subjects. As a result, learning maths is reasonable. In contrast, sometimes learn math could be the burden. Some students who are majoring in business and society could not need much math knowledge. These students need to spend much time on social and communication with people instead of numbers. Hence, in some situations, some students do need to reduce some mathematics courses. Besides, it's enough for normal people to learn calculation and foundational geometry which could be all the mathematic issues people can use in daily life. In conclusion, math is a foundational subject, but not so necessary to all the students in different majors. So I recommend students study math firstly until they believe they learn enough extent of math that can satisfy their work.
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mathematics
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at whichever the study level. It seems to
be argued
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students
should
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. I believe
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students
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learn
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enough
extent. The essay here
is aimed
to discuss both sides of learning mathematics.

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with,
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mathematics
is an
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important
and long-history
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subject
. It takes
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a lot of
advantages to human kinds.
For example
, our science system
is based
on the
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maths
, and it has become the most useful tools in a hundred years ago. Although not everyone could become a mathematician, For a common person,
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maths
are
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used
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such as calculation.
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math
knowledge is necessary.
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,
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learn
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maths
is a
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good
method to
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logic thinking which could be
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used
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.
As a result
, learning
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maths
is reasonable.

In contrast
,
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math
could be the burden.
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Some
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students
who are majoring in business and society could not need much
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math
knowledge. These
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students
need to spend much time on social and communication with
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people
instead
of numbers.
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situations,
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do need to
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mathematics
courses.
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, it's
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for normal
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to
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calculation and foundational geometry which could be all the mathematic issues
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people
can
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use
in daily life.

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math
is a foundational
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,
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different
majors.
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I recommend
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students
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math
firstly
until they believe they
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learn
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enough
extent of
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math
that can satisfy their work.
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IELTS essay Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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