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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle or should people make their own decisions v.1

Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle or should people make their own decisions v. 1
Decision making has a vital role in everybody's life. Therefore, a school of thought argues that, it is the responsiblity of higher authorities to take decisions about one's way of life. while other school of thought believes that, it is the sole responsibility of indivitual. Hence this essay analaysis whose responsibility is making decision regarding life style On the one hand, it is argued by many people that authorities should take decisions regarding life style because it aids the well being of a society. In other words, in this modern world people are facing a lot of problems in their life like health problems and lack of nutritional food. Hence, if government makes decisions about people life style, it can hamper this issues. For instance, many countries people should pay a lion share of there income as tax. so government canuse this amount for the basic need of a nation. Also have strignent rules for family planning and housing. there for it ensure the well being of a nation On the other hand, it is said by many people that decision making about life style is right of a person because then only he can achieve his goals. To be more specific, diperent people have different aim and tastes. As a result people will always choose a dicision accourding to their interest and it ensure them to achieve their task. For example, most of artist are succesful because of they followed their own decisions To conclude, after analysing both views it is clear that goverment and indvitual have equel importance in this scenario. Because goverment dcisions are for wellbeing of nation whereas indivitual dicision helps to achieve goals
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Decision making
has a vital role in everybody's
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life
.
Therefore
, a school of
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thought
argues that, it is the
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responsiblity
of higher authorities to take
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decisions
about one's way of
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life
.
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while
other school of
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thought
believes that, it is the sole responsibility of
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indivitual
.
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Hence
this essay
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analaysis
whose responsibility is making
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decision
regarding
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life
style

On the one hand, it
is argued
by
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many
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people
that authorities should take
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decisions
regarding
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life
style
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because
it aids the
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well being
of a society.
In other words
, in this modern world
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people
are facing
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a lot of
problems in their
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life
like health problems and lack of nutritional food.
Hence
, if
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government
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makes
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decisions
about
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people
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life
style, it can hamper this issues.
For instance
,
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many
countries
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people
should pay a lion share of there income as tax.
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so
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government
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canuse
this amount for the basic need of a nation.
Also
have
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strignent
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rules
for family planning and housing.
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there
for it ensure the
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well being
of a nation

On the other hand
, it
is said
by
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many
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people
that
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decision making
about
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life
style is right of a person
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because
then
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only
he can achieve his goals. To be more specific,
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diperent
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people
have
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different
aim and tastes.
As a result
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people
will always choose a
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dicision
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accourding
to their interest and it
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ensure
them to achieve their task.
For example
,
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most of artist
are
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succesful
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because of they
followed their
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own
decisions

To conclude
, after
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analysing
both views it is
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clear
that
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goverment
and
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indvitual
have
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equel
importance in this scenario.
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Because
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goverment
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dcisions
are for
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wellbeing
of nation whereas
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indivitual
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dicision
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helps
to achieve
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goals
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes
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IELTS essay Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle or should people make their own decisions v. 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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