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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by thr government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? give reasons for your answer and relevant examples. v.1

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by thr government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? v. 1
Public health care and schooling are the fundamental elements of building a prosperous and stable society in one's country. I personally believe that having a free schooling mechanism and health care system are the key responsibilities for the authority to provide for its citizens. The public should not be worried about paying for these services. Schooling should be a free service. it provides equal opportunities for every single child to receive education. The influence of having children being well educated is tremendous. It is creating a great asset back to the society and it increased the chance of mobility of lower class people to move upward and exchange with a better lifestyle for themselves. The economic change will have a positive impact when the citizen's education level is higher, it attracts foreign investors, business and students to come to your country for further development. Health care is significant to citizens as it provides the sense of security and a safety net for them. Medical cost is considered a high expense compare to other expenses and fees because of its medicine, equipment and service charges, etc. The ministry should provide a proper system to the public in order to ensure that every single person will receive a treatment when they are ill. Not only rich people can afford it, but any class of the people in the society is able to enjoy the healthcare treatment. Take America as an example, considering many black people are unable to pay for the hospital bills, nor pay for an insurance to cover the medical charges, the death rate of the black people is significantly higher compared to the white people in the States. In conclusion, education and health care should be the ministry's responsibility instead of the people. Considering the government is providing a free education and health care system, people are more likely to work harder and happier. It is also building a positive image of a government and show it cares.
Public
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health
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care
and schooling are the fundamental elements of building a prosperous and stable society in one's country. I
personally
believe that having a free schooling mechanism and
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health
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care
system are the key responsibilities for the authority to
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provide
for its citizens. The public should not
be worried
about paying for these services.

Schooling should be a free service.
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it
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provides
equal opportunities for every single child to receive
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education
. The influence of having children being
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well educated
is tremendous. It is creating a great asset back to the society and it increased the chance of mobility of lower
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class
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people
to
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move
upward and exchange with a better lifestyle for themselves. The economic
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change
will have a
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positive
impact when the citizen's
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education
level is higher, it attracts foreign investors, business and students to
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come
to your country for
further
development.

Health
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care
is significant to citizens as it
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provides
the sense of security and a safety net for them. Medical cost
is considered
a high expense compare to other expenses and fees
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because
of its medicine, equipment and service charges, etc. The ministry should
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provide
a proper system to the public in order to ensure that every single person will receive a treatment when they are ill. Not
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only
rich
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people
can afford it,
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but
any
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class
of the
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people
in the society is able to enjoy the healthcare treatment. Take America as an example, considering
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many
black
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people
are unable to pay for the hospital bills, nor pay for an insurance to cover the medical charges, the death rate of the black
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people
is
significantly
higher compared to the white
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people
in the States.

In conclusion
,
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education
and
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health
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care
should be the ministry's responsibility
instead
of the
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people
. Considering the
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government
is providing a free
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education
and
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health
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care
system,
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people
are more likely to work harder and happier. It is
also
building a
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positive
image of a
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government
and
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show
it
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cares
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by thr government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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