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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? Discuss the above and give your opinion using examples. v.2

Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? Discuss the above and give your opinion using examples. v. 2
Nowadays, without education and health, society may not flourish and survive; however, deciding who is to provide this is a sensitive topic. In my opinion, up to tenth standard education and basic healthcare should be funded by the government and beyond this would be the responsibility of citizens. This essay will discuss these two points in the following paragraphs. To begin with, it should be the government who is responsible to allocate funds to provide free learning up to Matriculation and basic healthcare facility. This is because cost of high-school education is usually minimum, and it is possible for even developing nations to manage fund for it. For example, Germany, which is considered of having a better quality of education, do provides free learning system till an end of tenth standard. As a result, they have a high-ratio of literate population. Secondly, it’s the right of all the citizens to acquired basic and emergency medical services. For instance, in the USA, it’s the basic right of every citizen to availed free healthcare treatment. Consequently, people have better conditions of health. On the other hand, higher education and expensive medical treatments should be paid by citizens themselves. University education is usually expensive and it is, therefore not reliable for government to pay for it, as tax payers money should be utilized in a more balanced way. Hence, it becomes the citizens who would pay. Also, there are medical cases which are having high-cost and eventually government should not be comply to fund it. As an example, there are some medical surgeries like, Lungs transplant, Liver transplant etc, for which individuals should managed amount. Seen in this light, it is obvious, that not all healthcare and education related facilities are the domain of the government, and people should contribute in it. To conclude, education and healthcare facilities are the dire requirement of a society. Although, it is the responsibility of a government to utilize some percentage of its budget for developing an educated and healthy nation, citizens are obliged to pay by their own when the fund required is exorbitant.
Nowadays, without
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education
and health, society may not flourish and survive;
however
, deciding who is to provide this is a sensitive topic. In my opinion, up to tenth standard
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education
and
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basic
healthcare should
be funded
by the
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government
and beyond this would be the responsibility of
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citizens
. This essay will discuss these two points in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, it should be the
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government
who is responsible to allocate funds to provide free learning up to Matriculation and
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basic
healthcare facility. This is
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because
cost of high-school
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education
is
usually
minimum, and it is possible for even developing nations to manage
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fund
for it.
For example
, Germany, which
is considered
of having a better quality of
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education
, do provides free learning system till an
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end
of tenth standard.
As a result
, they have a high-ratio of literate population.
Secondly
, it’s the right of all the
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citizens
to acquired
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basic
and emergency
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medical
services.
For instance
, in the USA, it’s the
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basic
right of every
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citizen
to availed free healthcare treatment.
Consequently
,
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people
have better conditions of health.

On the other hand
, higher
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education
and expensive
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medical
treatments should
be paid
by
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citizens
themselves. University
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education
is
usually
expensive and it is,
therefore
not reliable for
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government
to pay for it, as tax payers money should
be utilized
in a more balanced way.
Hence
, it becomes the
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citizens
who would pay.
Also
, there are
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medical
cases which are having high-cost and
eventually
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government
should not be
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comply
to
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fund
it. As an example, there are
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some
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medical
surgeries like, Lungs transplant, Liver transplant etc, for which individuals should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "manage"
managed
amount.
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Seen
in this light, it is obvious, that not all healthcare and
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education
related facilities are the domain of the
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government
, and
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people
should contribute in it.

To conclude
,
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education
and healthcare facilities are the dire requirement of a society. Although, it is the responsibility of a
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government
to utilize
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some
percentage of its budget for developing an educated and healthy nation,
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citizens
are obliged
to pay by their
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own
when the
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fund
required is exorbitant.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? Discuss the above and give your opinion using examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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