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Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by the government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services Discuss the above and give your opinion using example v.1

Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by the government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services Discuss the above and give your opinion using example v. 1
Human beings have needed five basic need to sustain, education and health care shear a major part. Education status and availability of health care facility denotes the success of a country, government should make more effective plan to provide this basic need to people. Some people think that individuals should pay all of their expenses for education and health, but as far as I am concerned, my personal preference is government should pay all of the cost of education and health care facility. For a few significant reasons I fill that way, my reasons goes as follow. First of all, citizen of any government country should pay their tax, so they deserve some feedback from the government. Educated people and health is one of the great assets of any country, the help our economic development, social improvement. If government should pay all the expenses for education and health it will give a great feedback in future, a huge number of working capable people were available to develop our economic situation and make a sustainable development. For example, in Bangladesh educations rate was only 34% before 2000 when government make the primary and secondary education free for all student the number of educated people should increase now it almost two fold form the 2000 level. Secondly, technological development make all think available to people but it costly, sometime people is not able to bear it. So government needs to make policy to pay all medical help and health care facility to the local people. When people should pay their health care fees they should not able to get better treatment because lack of money and assets. When government should pay all fees, then an equality situation created in our society, government should able to fulfill all of their plans and policy. In sum, when government pays all of the expenditure of education and health, they can ensure all people get better education and medical facility. However, when people should pay it creates an imbalance society that will be harmful for our society. So government should pay all the expenses to make a sustainable society.
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shear a major part.
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status and availability of
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health
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facility denotes the success of a country,
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government
should
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make
more effective plan to provide this basic need to
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people
.
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people
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think
that individuals should
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all of their expenses for
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education
and
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am concerned
, my personal preference is
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should
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all of the
cost of
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and
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facility. For a few significant reasons I fill that way, my reasons goes
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as follow
.

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, citizen of any
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country should
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pay
their tax,
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they deserve
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some
feedback from the
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government
. Educated
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people
and
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health
is one of the great assets of any country, the
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help
our economic development, social improvement. If
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government
should
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pay
all the expenses for
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education
and
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health
it will give a great feedback
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in future
, a huge number of working capable
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people
were available to develop our economic situation and
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make
a sustainable development.
For example
, in Bangladesh
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educations
rate was
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only
34%
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before
2000 when
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government
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make
the primary and secondary
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education
free for all student the number of educated
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people
should increase
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now
it almost
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two fold
form the 2000 level.

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, technological development
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all
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think
available to
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people
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but
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it
costly, sometime
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is
not able to bear it.
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needs to
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policy to
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all medical
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and
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facility to the local
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people
. When
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should
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their
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health
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fees they should not able to
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get
better treatment
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because
lack of money and assets. When
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government
should
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pay
all fees, then an equality situation created in our
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society
,
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government
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should able
to fulfill all of their plans and policy.

In sum, when
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government
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pays
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all of the
expenditure of
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and
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health
, they can ensure all
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people
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get
better
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education
and medical facility.
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, when
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people
should
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pay
it creates an imbalance
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society
that will be harmful for our
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society
.
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should
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all the expenses to
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make
a sustainable
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society
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
65Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by the government or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services Discuss the above and give your opinion using example v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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