Shopping has become an integral part of our life. Young people are more attracted to shopping compare to older generation and this is due to the fact it has become a habit for them. Some people argue that people spend more time in other beneficial activities in their free time. I completely agree with this point, because time is the most precious thing we have in this world.
To start with, People spend more time in shopping because they have more purchasing power. There are many job opportunities available in the market compared to the past and almost all of them paid well. So peoples disposable income has been increased and they spend this in shopping. Another essential point is people spend due to influence by their peers who do shopping at almost every week, with no reasons. A recent survey from abc at the shopping mall in Kurukshetra city, indicate that most of their sales come from younger people, whom just start their career.
In my view, Time is the most important thing and cannot be reverted. So we should encourage people to do some useful activities like sports or gym rather than wasting their time in shopping. Moreover, people from technical background can spend their time to enhance their skills. For example, Technical people can learn Artificial Intelligence, which would help them to grow in their career.
To conclude, this is true that younger people attract to shopping very easily, but they should think and encourage about other activities which keep them healthy and up to date, which would help in their career.
Shopping
has become an integral part of our life. Young
people
are more attracted to
shopping
compare to older generation and this is due to the fact it has become a habit for them.
Some
people
argue that
people
spend
more
time
in other beneficial activities in their free
time
. I completely
agree
with this point,
because
time
is the most precious thing we have in this world.
To
start
with,
People
spend
more
time
in
shopping
because
they have more purchasing power. There are
many
job opportunities available in the market compared to the past and almost all of them paid well.
So
peoples
disposable income has been
increased and
they
spend
this in
shopping
. Another essential point is
people
spend
due to influence by their peers who do
shopping
at almost every week, with no reasons. A recent survey from
abc
at the
shopping
mall in
Kurukshetra
city, indicate that most of their sales
come
from younger
people
, whom
just
start
their career.
In my view,
Time
is the most
important
thing and cannot
be reverted
.
So
we should encourage
people
to do
some
useful activities like sports or gym
rather
than wasting their
time
in
shopping
.
Moreover
,
people
from technical background can
spend
their
time
to enhance their
skills
.
For example
, Technical
people
can learn Artificial Intelligence, which would
help
them to grow in their career.
To conclude
, this is true that younger
people
attract to
shopping
very
easily
,
but
they should
think
and encourage about other activities which
keep
them healthy and up to date, which would
help
in their career.
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