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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. You should spend 40 minutes on this task. v.4

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. v. 4
Art and science are said to be the standing pillars of our society. Both, an art enthusiast and a scientist, play an important role in the formation of our society. Their contributions together are highly appreciated and praised by the world. Their work has influenced many generations. But, deciding on who plays a dominant role is difficult. However, in today’s world where discovery and innovation are the buzzwords, I think that the scientists have the upper hand. An artist is capable, hardworking and said to even depict one’s mind. In the past, an artist was a shining armour in the dark for many. An ideal example would be the reference of M. F. Hussain, who was admired by many people for his outstanding paintings. The works of some amazing artists like Da Vinci, Othello, etc. also requires a mention. Various artists have also depicted the evil side of the society like child labour, AIDS, Women Crimes through their art. On the other hand, scientists are constantly working to make our lives simpler. The scientific revolution is considered an epic. Through new discoveries, they aid the society in overcoming the obstacles and challenges. Scientists come up with ideas to improve our quality of life. Through them we are able to achieve longevity, excellent innovations and discover the wonders of nature. Adding to this, scientists also do research and experiments to withdraw all the possible threats to the society. Meanwhile, almost all the equipment that we use In our day to day life have a series of efforts behind them. So from the above discussion, my conscience favours a scientist than an artist with concerns to their contributions. Both these as mentioned earlier are vital for us. An artist acts as a source of inspiration and information, whereas a scientist works as a source of innovations and inventions.
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to be the standing pillars of our
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important
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society
. Their contributions together are
highly
appreciated and praised by the world. Their work has influenced
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many
generations.
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today
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think
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scientists
have the upper hand.

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artist
is capable, hardworking and said to even depict one’s mind. In the past, an
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artist
was a shining
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in the dark for
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many
. An ideal example would be the reference of M. F. Hussain, who
was admired
by
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many
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people
for his outstanding paintings. The works of
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some
amazing
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artists
like
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Da
Vinci, Othello, etc.
also
requires a mention. Various
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artists
have
also
depicted the evil side of the
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society
like child
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labour
, AIDS, Women Crimes through their art.

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scientists
are
constantly
working to
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make
our
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simpler. The scientific revolution
is considered
an epic. Through new discoveries, they aid the
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society
in overcoming the obstacles and challenges.
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Scientists
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come
up with
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ideas
to
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improve
our quality of life. Through them we are able to achieve longevity, excellent innovations and discover the wonders of nature. Adding to this,
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scientists
also
do research and experiments to withdraw all the possible threats to the
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society
. Meanwhile, almost all the equipment that we
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use
In our
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day to day
life have a series of efforts behind them.

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So
from the above discussion, my conscience
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favours
a
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scientist
than an
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artist
with concerns to their contributions. Both these as mentioned earlier are vital for us. An
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artist
acts as a source of inspiration and information, whereas a
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scientist
works as a source of innovations and inventions.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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