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Scientists and technology experts are more valued by modern society than musicians and artists To what extent to do you agree? v.1

Scientists and technology experts are more valued by modern society than musicians and artists v. 1
As technology develops nothing remain untouched and paper is no exception, E- books downloads are beginning to change the way the information is created, disseminated and viewed. Although, establishments are struggling with piracy and life span of e books, individual will also gain an Eco friendly and no shipping and handling cost. This essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of e-book. There two primary reasons why reading e-books are more advantageous than reading the hard copy, Firstly, it is far more Eco- friendly, The lumberjack does not have to cut down the trees which eventually lowers environmental impact, Extensive research has been made by Australian Universities, for example, a recent publish shows that with the launch of e book the demand for paper books has been declined by the almost 30%. Secondly, cost saving, individual does not have to go beyond their budget against shipping and handling cost because these books can easily be downloadable from server or they can easily go through it online with small device. One research article suggests that online reading and downloading supersede the hard copy delivery of the books by 36%. Overall, e-books are better than traditional books because of its low deforestation impact and cost effectiveness. On the other hand, one cannot turn a blind eye against the disadvantages as well, primarily, the piracy, the authors and publishers are cross sword against the pirated copies of those books, although, they introduce patent rights, but still it is a significant issue nowadays, for instance, most of the underdeveloped countries cannot afford those books, so they opt for pirated version. Consequently, the life span, as scientists are brainstorming ideas to develop the method to keep those books in cloud storage for hundreds of years, even though they are still struggling to get the best way to protect, for example, ABC cloud software has been launched to maintain the data for years, To conclude, E books have become increasingly common, while individual no doubt experience the piracy and data maintenance, it is in fact, these barriers will lead to the main advantage of reading e books which are Eco friendly and cost effective. Hence it is believed that in years to come, the world would see a rapid rise their sales.
As technology develops nothing remain untouched and paper is no exception, E-
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
downloads are beginning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the way the information
is created
, disseminated and viewed. Although, establishments are struggling with piracy and life span of e
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, individual will
also
gain an Eco friendly and no shipping and handling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cost
. This essay will discuss the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects of e-book.

There two primary reasons why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
e-books are more advantageous than
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reading
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
copy,
Firstly
, it is far more Eco- friendly, The lumberjack does not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down the trees which
eventually
lowers environmental impact, Extensive research has
been made
by Australian Universities,
for example
, a recent
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publish
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shows
that with the launch of e
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book
the demand for paper
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books
has
been declined
by the almost 30%.
Secondly
,
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cost
saving, individual does not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go beyond their budget against shipping and handling
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cost
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because
these
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books
can
easily
be downloadable from
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
server or
they can
easily
go through it online with
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small
device. One research article suggests that online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
and downloading supersede the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
copy delivery of the
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books
by 36%.
Overall
, e-books are better than traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its low deforestation impact and
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
cost effectiveness
.

On the other hand
, one cannot turn a blind eye against the disadvantages
as well
,
primarily
, the piracy, the authors and publishers are cross sword against the pirated copies of those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
, although, they introduce patent rights,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
still
it is a significant issue nowadays,
for instance
, most of the underdeveloped countries cannot afford those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they opt for pirated version.
Consequently
, the life span, as scientists are brainstorming
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
to develop the method to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
in cloud storage for hundreds of years,
even though
they are
still
struggling to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the best way to protect,
for example
, ABC cloud software has
been launched
to maintain the data for years,

To conclude
, E
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
have become
increasingly
common, while individual no doubt experience the piracy and data maintenance, it is in fact, these barriers will lead to the main advantage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
e
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
which are Eco friendly and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cost
effective.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
it
is believed
that in years to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
, the world would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
a rapid rise their sales.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Scientists and technology experts are more valued by modern society than musicians and artists v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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