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Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. v. 2
Presently people are consuming huge amounts of harmful and chemical foods. It must take serious measures to prevent this from proceeding. Some people think that the cure for this is to educate people, while others think that it does not work. We will analyze both ideas equally in this essay. Firstly, we all know that eating such unhealthy foods does not lead to good results. We may face serious illnesses as a result. Therefore, to prevent this, we need to warn people and tell and explain the diseases that occur as a result of eating such toxic eats. For example, the now widespread coronavirus is both harmful and difficult to cure in people who eat harmfully and irregularly. However, even though they know how harmful unhealthy foods are, people are not stopping consuming such foods. moreover, people find such foods delicious and convenient for themselves. No matter how much such people are told about the dangers of sickly diets, they are unable to refrain from such foods. People do not immediately feel the effects of chemical foods, as a result, people continue to eat destructive meals without worrying about their health. No doubt eating such foods can lead to serious diseases such as diabetes, obesity, and the like. For example, according to scientists, many people suffer from plumpness as a result of eating fast food. In conclusion, the solution to these problems depends on the people themselves. To solve such a problem, people need to be educated and explained from a young age. The optimal way to solve any difficulty is to educate these communities properly from a young age.
Presently
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people
are consuming huge amounts of harmful and chemical
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foods
. It
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must
take serious measures to
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prevent
this from proceeding.
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Some
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people
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think
that the cure for this is to educate
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people
, while others
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think
that it does not work. We will analyze both
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ideas
equally
in this essay.

Firstly
, we all know that
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eating
such unhealthy
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foods
does not lead to
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good
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results
. We may face serious illnesses as a
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result
.
Therefore
, to
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prevent
this, we need to warn
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people
and
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tell
and
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explain
the diseases that occur as a
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result
of
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eating
such toxic eats.
For example
, the
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now
widespread coronavirus is both harmful and difficult to cure in
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people
who eat
harmfully
and
irregularly
.

However
,
even though
they know how harmful unhealthy
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foods
are,
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people
are not stopping consuming such
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foods
.
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moreover
,
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people
find such
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foods
delicious and convenient for themselves. No matter how much such
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people
are
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told
about the
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dangers
of sickly diets, they are unable to refrain from such
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foods
.
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People
do not immediately feel the effects of chemical
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foods
, as a
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result
,
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people
continue to eat destructive meals without worrying about their health. No doubt
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eating
such
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foods
can lead to serious diseases such as diabetes, obesity, and the like.
For example
, according to scientists,
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many
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people
suffer from plumpness as a
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result
of
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eating
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fast
food.

In conclusion
, the solution to these problems depends on the
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people
themselves. To solve such a problem,
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people
need to
be educated
and
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explained
from a young age. The optimal way to solve any difficulty is to educate these communities
properly
from a young age.
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IELTS essay Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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