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Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v.2

Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v. 2
It is long been said by many generations and scientists to preserve environment either as a warning or as a request. Consequences of extreme use of energy resources have led people to confront global warming’s multiple issues. Despite these many requests and warnings people still do not restrict the use of energy resources. There are two main reasons: people are so accustomed to use those sources that now it is impossible for them to live without, companies which are selling those energies has made this generation so addictive that they do not have any other option. When any new way is introduced to cut down physical work, people blindly accept the suggested path, without even care about the adverse effects on the environment. In turn, they are so indoctrinated with these resources that those become the integral part of their lifestyle. For example, when cars are launched then people abruptly purchased cars for their comfort, they did not even think for a second that what level of damage it could make in future if cars become ubiquitous. Now, even though, everyone knows that cars produce carbon footprint and cars have been deteriorating the environmental stability, still they are not ready to reduce the use of cars so that carbon level in the atmosphere would decrease. Consequently, industries which promote various product had made today’s generation paralysed, in term of using selecting tools over an over. So many mobile games companies have been advertising various games, which not only make teenagers addictive but also consume a large amount of mobile’s battery. In fact, because of extensive use of phone, electricity consumption level increased at an exponential rate. Additionally, phones also produce some frequencies which are harmful for the birds and humans also in long haul. For example, Vodaphone, network provider has requested people to use their mobile phones as optimum as they can. It also warns about harmful radiations, but because of large amount of Vodaphone' s advertisements people are overlooking warning and continuing as the same. There are several graceful and forceful technical solutions to make confine the usage of energy sources. Firstly, the government could launch some scheme where the people having very less usage of personal cars can avail tax reductions. Secondly, the government would put some harsh penalty on those who exceed the pre-defined usage of mobile networks. To deduce, addiction is the problem, no one can escape easily. So, forceful steps from the respective government would do the trick in order to save the environment.
It is long
been said
by
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many
generations and scientists to preserve environment either as a warning or as a request. Consequences of extreme
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use
of
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energy
resources have led
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people
to confront global warming’s multiple issues. Despite these
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many
requests and warnings
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people
still
do not restrict the
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use
of
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energy
resources. There are two main reasons:
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people
are
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so
accustomed to
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use
those sources that
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now
it is impossible for them to
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live
without,
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companies
which are selling those
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energies
has made this generation
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so
addictive that they do not have any other option.

When any new way
is introduced
to
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cut
down physical work,
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people
blindly
accept the suggested path, without even care about the adverse effects on the environment. In turn, they are
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so
indoctrinated with these resources that those become the integral part of their lifestyle.
For example
, when
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cars
are launched
then
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people
abruptly
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purchased
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cars
for their comfort, they did not even
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think
for a second that what level of damage it could
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make
in future if
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cars
become ubiquitous.
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Now
,
even though
, everyone knows that
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cars
produce carbon footprint and
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cars
have been deteriorating the environmental stability,
still
they are not ready to
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reduce
the
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use
of
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cars
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so
that carbon level in the atmosphere would decrease.

Consequently
, industries which promote various product had made
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today
’s generation
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paralysed
, in term of using selecting tools over an over.
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So
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many
mobile games
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companies
have been advertising various games, which not
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only
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make
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teenagers
addictive
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but
also
consume a large amount of mobile’s battery. In fact,
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because
of extensive
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use
of phone, electricity consumption level increased at an exponential rate.
Additionally
, phones
also
produce
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some
frequencies which are harmful for the birds and humans
also
in long haul.
For example
,
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Vodaphone
, network provider has requested
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people
to
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use
their mobile phones as optimum as they can. It
also
warns about harmful radiations,
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but
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because
of large amount of
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Vodaphone&
#039; s advertisements
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people
are overlooking warning and continuing as the same.

There are several graceful and forceful technical solutions to
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make
confine the usage of
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energy
sources.
Firstly
, the
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government
could launch
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some
scheme where the
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people
having
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very
less usage of personal
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cars
can avail tax reductions.
Secondly
, the
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government
would put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
harsh penalty on those who exceed the
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pre-defined
usage of mobile networks.

To deduce, addiction is the problem, no one can escape
easily
.
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So
, forceful steps from the respective
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would do the trick in order to save the environment.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
419 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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