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Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v.1

Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v. 1
Dealing with serious environmental issues are the most debatable topic today. Who should be responsible to solve this; governments, factories or the public? Although a person can be self-responsible to act to control this problem, majorities of the role need to be taken by the authorities and industries, with which I strongly agree. This essay will discuss both the views and present support for the first argument. To begin with, administrations and organizations need to hold the responsibility of environmental pollutions. This is because the manufacturing companies and factories are the major sources of this cause, therefore there should be laws to penalized them by making them bear the cost of measures taken to improve the conditions. If the government bodies collaboratively work with INGOs, it will be more beneficial and would be easy to handle the case globally. To illustrate that, UAE, Saudi, and Oman are working jointly to resolve the weather problem from the root and they are also getting support from their in-house companies. Thus, all the nations need to act actively to solve the current and upcoming threats as soon as possible. On the other hand, its citizens' responsibility to maintain hygiene in their nearby surroundings. It means they can use recyclable products such as paper bags instead of plastics to hold their stuff, and they can also use their kitchen waste as fertilizer in the garden. Moreover, their active participation is required for tree plantation and less consumption of fossil fuels. It would be a wise step if individuals contribute their time by doing some voluntary activities to reduce the pollution effects wherein they can work on awareness campaigns and surroundings cleaning activities. For example, College students have recently participated in beach cleaning voluntary tasks as a part of their course curriculum. Consequently, it turned out to be a positive experience for them, and this made them keener and focused to be an active and hygiene citizen. To conclude, while a person holds the responsibility to not be a cause for pollution, its government, and companies' responsibilities to take this concern on priority and get it solve or take it under control. In my opinion, not a single delay should happen to wake up and fix the issues as it already threatened the globe and everything is on risk.
Dealing with serious environmental issues are the most debatable topic
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today
. Who should be responsible to solve this;
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
, factories or the public? Although a person can be self-responsible to act to control this problem, majorities of the role need to
be taken
by the authorities and industries, with which I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
. This essay will discuss both the views and present support for the
first
argument.

To
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begin
with, administrations and organizations need to hold the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibility
of environmental pollutions. This is
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because
the manufacturing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
and factories are the major sources of this cause,
therefore
there should be laws to penalized them by making them bear the cost of measures taken to
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improve
the conditions. If the
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government
bodies
collaboratively
work with
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INGOs
, it will be more beneficial and would be easy to handle the case globally. To illustrate that, UAE, Saudi, and Oman are working
jointly
to resolve the weather problem from the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
root and
they are
also
getting support from their in-
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house
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
.
Thus
, all the nations need to act
actively
to solve the
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current
and upcoming threats as
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soon
as possible.

On the other hand
, its citizens'
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibility
to maintain hygiene in their nearby surroundings. It means they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
recyclable products such as paper bags
instead
of plastics to hold their stuff, and they can
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their kitchen waste as fertilizer in the garden.
Moreover
, their active participation
is required
for tree plantation and less consumption of fossil fuels. It would be a wise step if individuals contribute their time by doing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
voluntary activities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the pollution effects wherein they can work on awareness campaigns and surroundings cleaning activities.
For example
, College students have recently participated in beach cleaning voluntary tasks as a part of their course curriculum.
Consequently
, it turned out to be a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
experience for them, and this made them keener and focused to be an active and hygiene citizen.

To conclude
, while a person holds the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibility
to not be a cause for pollution, its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
'
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
responsibilities
to take this concern on priority and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it solve or take it under control. In my opinion, not a single delay should happen to wake up and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the issues as it already threatened the globe and everything is on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Scientist have been warning for many years about the importance of protecting the environment and that we must limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be en v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
384 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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