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TPO22 – Independent: A/D? Teachers should not make their political or social views known to students in classroom. v.1

TPO22 – Independent: A/D? Teachers should not make their political or social views known to students in classroom. v. 1
Teachers are the most effective people in every individual' s life because they can convey their information and beliefs to the students. Hence, I believe that teachers should not express their social and political views to students in the classroom because students are prone to imitate anything that they see or hear. In addition, they need to learn diverse aspects of an issue and to interpret the situations by themselves. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint. Students are extremely affected by their teachers because they think that the teachers are always right. That is to say, any information which is presented by the teachers are accepted and absorbed by vulnerable students so it plays a decisive role in every pupil' s viewpoint. For example, I always pay attention to what I explain to my students, especially that my major is economics and I have to mention so many political and social issues in the class to make an economic problem clear. That is why my students learned the economic facts but not my standpoint. Everyone needs to be able to interpret any situation in a society and advocate the proper side if necessary. In fact, the teaching method in schools have a great impact on a students' perspective of the surrounding matters. For example, electing an efficient president for the country, who can improve the country' s situation, requires a good understanding and interpretation of political parties which can be obtained through search and study. Nevertheless, the information that a teacher conveys to students instead of teaching ways of assessing different aspects of every political issue may be retained by the pupils and build a specific viewpoint toward issues. Hence, the teacher' s point of view may make the students take a wrong decision about the election. Decisively, if one assesses his own point of view toward particular notions, one soon realizes that his teacher influenced it very much. In fact, the teachers should consider their provided knowledge for the students in the class because the student' s characteristic is formable and they trust the teachers' explanations. In addition, all aspects of an issue should be taught to students to be able to distinguish between the right and wrong side of an issue.
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because
they can convey their information and beliefs to the
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students
.
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, I believe that
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teachers
should not express their social and political views to
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students
in the classroom
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because
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students
are prone to imitate anything that they
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see
or hear.
In addition
, they need to learn diverse aspects of an
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issue
and to interpret the situations by themselves. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.

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extremely
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affected
by their
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teachers
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because
they
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think
that the
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teachers
are always right.
That is
to say, any information which
is presented
by the
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teachers
are
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accepted
and absorbed by vulnerable
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students
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so
it plays a decisive role in every
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pupil&
#039; s viewpoint.
For example
, I always pay attention to what I
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explain
to my
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students
,
especially
that my major is economics and I
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have to
mention
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so
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many
political and social
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issues
in the
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class
to
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make
an economic problem
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clear
.
That is
why my
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students
learned the economic facts
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but
not my standpoint.

Everyone needs to be able to interpret any situation in a society and advocate the proper side if necessary. In fact, the teaching method in schools have a great impact on a
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students&
#039; perspective of the surrounding matters.
For example
, electing an efficient president for the country, who can
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improve
the
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country&
#039; s situation, requires a
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good
understanding and interpretation of political parties which can
be obtained
through search and study.
Nevertheless
, the information that a
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teacher
conveys to
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students
instead
of teaching ways of assessing
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different
aspects of every political
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issue
may
be retained
by the pupils and build a specific viewpoint toward
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issues
.
Hence
, the
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teacher&
#039; s point of view may
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make
the
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students
take a
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wrong
decision about the election.

Decisively
, if one assesses his
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own
point of view toward particular notions, one
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soon
realizes that his
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teacher
influenced it
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very
much. In fact, the
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teachers
should consider their provided knowledge for the
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students
in the
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class
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because
the
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student&
#039; s characteristic is
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formable and
they trust the
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teachers&
#039; explanations.
In addition
, all aspects of an
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issue
should
be taught
to
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students
to be able to distinguish between the right and
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wrong
side of an
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issue
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO22 – Independent: A/D? Teachers should not make their political or social views known to students in classroom. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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