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Scientific research today attempts to go too far. There are certain things in the world which we simply should not try to understand. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Scientific research today attempts to go too far. There are certain things in the world which we simply should not try to understand. v. 1
It seems that on the issue of how much we should try to understand about our world, there are two schools of thought. Some people argue in favour of acceptance rather than understanding, while others prefer a more scientific approach which supports curiosity and research into all things. Can the former opinion be justified? Some people argue that there are many things in this world that we will never be able to understand, no matter how hard we try. For instance, can we ever really understand the universe? Can we ever really understand our own existence? Can we ever be sure about fully understanding other people? Why then, the argument goes, should we bother to try? Simply because we cannot image being able to understand something, however, does not mean that we should halt all attempts to do so. Even today, apparently, scientists have no idea as to why we blush. Letting others know when we have done something wrong seems counter-evolutionary. However, if we were to discover the reason, it may lead to a revelation about how our mind and body operate. New discoveries can take us to fascinating and exciting new places, and we can all potentially gain and develop from these discoveries. Of course we have no way of knowing where new revelations will come from so we need to explore widely. In conclusion, though it may often seem to us that some things are so complex that perhaps we should not even try to understand them, it is only through understanding that we can gain insight and only from insight that we can truly develop. The enormity of the task therefore is no reason to limit our areas of research
It seems that on the issue of how much we should try to
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about our world, there are two schools of
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argue in
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favour
of acceptance
rather
than understanding, while others prefer a more scientific approach which supports curiosity and research into all things. Can the former opinion
be justified
?

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Some
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argue that there are
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many
things in this world that we will never be able to
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understand
, no matter how
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hard
we try.
For instance
, can we ever
really
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understand
the universe? Can we ever
really
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understand
our
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own
existence? Can we ever be sure about
fully
understanding other
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people
? Why then, the argument goes, should we bother to try?

Simply
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because
we cannot image being able to
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understand
something,
however
, does not mean that we should halt all attempts to do
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so
. Even
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today
,
apparently
, scientists have no
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idea
as to why we blush. Letting others know when we have done something
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wrong
seems counter-evolutionary.
However
, if we were to discover the reason, it may lead to a revelation about how our mind and body operate. New discoveries can take us to fascinating and exciting new places, and we can all
potentially
gain and develop from these discoveries. Of
The comma is probably missing here: "course, we".
course we
have no way of knowing where new revelations will
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come
from
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so
we need to explore
widely
.

In conclusion
, though it may
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often
seem to us that
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some
things are
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so
complex that perhaps we should not even try to
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understand
them, it is
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only
through understanding that we can gain insight and
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only
from insight that we can
truly
develop. The enormity of the task
therefore
is no reason to limit our areas of
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research
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6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Scientific research today attempts to go too far. There are certain things in the world which we simply should not try to understand. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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