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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v.3

Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 3
With the ever-increasing competitiveness among university graduates, many universities are figuring out the best method to assess a student academic achievement. Some people believe that handwritten examinations are not the most effective way to reflect students’ academic potential, others maintain that it is actually the best way to reveal students’ achievement. This essay will discuss both views as well as why only holding written examinations are not the best way to do so. People who think “Pen and paper” examinations are not the best argue that it cannot test the practical skills of a student. For instance, students who study electrical engineering not only need to learn the knowledge from the textbooks, but also have to do some practical experiments such as building circuits and power supplies. Without the practical examinations, we cannot examine the practical skills of those students and whether how to apply what they have learnt into reality. Hence, they prefer the best way is examinations should be held with a right balance between written and practical. In contrast, some maintain that “pen and paper” assessments are the most basic requirement for students to study further. They claim that if a student can’t even pass a written exam, he will not have enough knowledge to apply practically and won’t be qualified in the future. As an example, doctors have to first learn the knowledge in the textbooks to build up their confidence. Without knowledge they are unable to cure the patients. Allowing a doctor who failed in his written exams to proceed a surgery would become a tragedy to both sides. Therefore, they argue that “pen and paper” examinations are the first step of assessing students’ educational achievement and they are the best method. This essay discussed that the importance of holding a practical exam and also why “pen and paper” examinations are essential to assess students. In my opinion, both sides come up with a strong argument. Although I believe that “pen and paper” exams are necessary, we also need to find a right balance between written and practical exams in order to not to create an “exam-machine” to the world.
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academic achievement.
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people
believe that handwritten
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examinations
are not the most effective way to reflect
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students’
academic potential, others maintain that it is actually the
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best
way to reveal
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students’
achievement. This essay will discuss both views
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as well as
why
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written
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are not the
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best
way to do
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.

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who
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think
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“Pen
and paper”
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are not the
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best
argue that it cannot
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test
the
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practical
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skills
of a
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.
For instance
,
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who study electrical engineering not
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need to learn the
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knowledge
from the textbooks,
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also
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do
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some
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practical
experiments such as building circuits and power supplies. Without the
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practical
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examinations
, we cannot examine the
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practical
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skills
of those
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students
and whether how to apply what they have
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learnt
into reality.
Hence
, they prefer the
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best
way is
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examinations
should
be held
with a right balance between
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written
and practical.

In contrast
,
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some
maintain that
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“pen
and paper” assessments are the most basic requirement for
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students
to study
further
. They claim that if a
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student
can’t even pass a
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written
exam, he will not have
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enough
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knowledge
to apply
practically
and won’t
be qualified
in the future. As an example, doctors
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have to
first
learn the
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knowledge
in the textbooks to build up their confidence. Without
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knowledge they
are unable to cure the patients. Allowing a doctor who failed in his
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written
exams to proceed a surgery would become a tragedy to both sides.
Therefore
, they argue that
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“pen
and paper”
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examinations
are the
first
step of assessing
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students’
educational
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achievement and
they are the
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best
method.

This essay discussed that the importance of holding a
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practical
exam and
also
why
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“pen
and paper”
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examinations
are essential to assess
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students
. In my opinion, both sides
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come
up with a strong argument. Although I believe that
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“pen
and paper” exams are necessary, we
also
need to find a right balance between
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written
and
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practical
exams in order
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to not to
create an “exam-machine” to the world.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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